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Iviker

Iviker

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Voice & Emotion: 90/100
Their was plenty of talking, and in all the right places at the right times. The emotion was rather good, but like all stories, it could have improving. What I couldn't understand was why you added the tilde for thoughts, i'm not a genius on this or anything but, thoughts and tildes don't go together. That's like doing this for speech, %Bob ate a banana.%
Originality: 100/100
*Claps* Your the *FIRST* to get a 100/100 from me.
You got this for,
1) Names
2) The idea
3) Original ideas

Description: 90/100
Very good character desription, land formations, ect.
Not the best score, but not the worst grade. The dragon description was very good tbh.
Mechanics: 99/100
i'm not a genius on this or anything but, thoughts and tildes don't go together. That's like doing this for speech, %Bob ate a banana.%
So, you got -1 for that.

Characters: 40/100
*Cries*
You need much, MUCH more character develepment. I was shocked, other then that, this is a pretty good story.
The following need more development,
Skye
Sheeldah
Zek
Gode
Kad
Maraeth was pretty good though...
Plot: 100/100
Well thought out ideas, I got nothin' else... :\

Overall: 519/600
That's a... 86.5 - a B

04-Apr-2008 02:10:38

Patriotic Br

Patriotic Br

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Alrighty, Pork, so what rank do you think he should be? Also, when we're done here, I made an amazing update to our guild.
Arthas,
It's good to have a few characters, but if you have too many characters it makes it hard to keep up with them, and that will bring the score of a story WAY down. Just something I wanted to point out...

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04-Apr-2008 02:14:20 - Last edited on 04-Apr-2008 02:16:59 by Patriotic Br

xxDkreignxx

xxDkreignxx

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Yeah, the rewrite's almost done- Should be up in a week or two.
Gode isn't really a factor in the story- He's just brought up briefly. Kad as well. (Though it changes for both in the sequel)
Skye... I'm actually working on a couple of stories involving him, Zek, and Kad, in the re-write, which will, hopefully, will improve the Character Development (The idea for including the stories about them was suggested to me a while back to improve Character Development).
Seeldah is still under consideration- Her story is already reserved for another spot in the series, so I can't really reveal too much of it in the rewrite... but you can rest assured that there will be a lot more about her in the rewrite.
Thanks for the list, by the way- It's always helpful to know which characters people want to hear more about.
Thanks for the Review =D.

04-Apr-2008 02:26:55 - Last edited on 04-Apr-2008 02:36:16 by xxDkreignxx

Patriotic Br

Patriotic Br

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I'm sure Pork will get here sometime to tell you how much you are welcome :P
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04-Apr-2008 02:35:14 - Last edited on 04-Apr-2008 02:37:19 by Patriotic Br

Patriotic Br

Patriotic Br

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About your ranking...I'm thinking Journalist or Ink Slinger...but once we have Pork's opinion I'll make a final decision.

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04-Apr-2008 02:37:11

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