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xxDkreignxx

xxDkreignxx

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Exactly. I was trying to convey the feeling that the Story was coming to a close, to "upset" the reader (not literally). This way everyone will more interested when the sequel comes out: an ending to Part I that makes it seem that the Story's tied, up keeps the reader from guessing what'll come next, so they'll be more surprised in the Sequel.
In other words: I'm using Dramatic Irony.

30-Sep-2007 04:05:00 - Last edited on 30-Sep-2007 04:10:17 by xxDkreignxx

xxDkreignxx

xxDkreignxx

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Lol, can't wait. If you don't feel up to writing for a while, don't let others pester you for adds, go at your own pace. If you allow them to pressure you, you'll rush into an add too fast and it'll come out bad. I really could use some pointers on sentence construction, though: I'm gonna be rewriting that whole Chapter, it really is badly written (reasons above).

30-Sep-2007 04:21:37 - Last edited on 30-Sep-2007 04:28:45 by xxDkreignxx

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[#WH19Z9RBZ]

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Eh, I really don't feel like giving tips, if that's what you're asking. But here:
You need a subject, a verb, and descriptions (adverbs, adjectives, prepositions, stuff like that). Use different sentence starters, so all of your sentences don't start with "I" or "He" or "She". Use a variety of words.
Meh, that's all I can think of at the moment.

30-Sep-2007 04:34:25

6c91921auvd

6c91921auvd

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Ok first off this si a bit confusing
*"It got scared off after Seeldah arrived."*
It didn't get scared off, it realized the odds were against it and fled,
*I was surprised, had it really only been five days?*
Only five days! Thats a long time to be out cold, it unrealist, that should be a suprise almost.
* "No one's taken on an Avian and won, before.*
Don't need the comma there.
Other then that its good.
Brutal enough for ye???
~A Wise Old Owl~
Geo-

30-Sep-2007 04:52:26 - Last edited on 30-Sep-2007 04:58:30 by 6c91921auvd

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