iChuk: Yikes, what a twisted mother. There was definitely a lot going on in the story and crafted well enough to where it could fit the limit and give enough detail to paint a picture. I especially liked the addition of Gobb. It makes me want to know more about this strange man. You wouldn’t think a mother would be a killer—or worse, sacrifice her children—but it is also completely true in life, which is the scariest thought of all. Excellent job!
Polymath: This was an emotional entry for me, being a guy in love. Seeing the guy’s fingers being chopped off, then his head because the wife felt like her powers were condemned is something frightening. Unfortunately, it doesn’t target the theme exactly. This was more of a realization than a seemingly good character being evil or vice-a-versa. That doesn’t stop it from being a quality entry, though. Detail and choice of words were great. Fantastic!
Azigarth: Interesting. So the demons crucified the wrong man and let the guilty one go free. This was a pretty good entry, but why must it be noted that demons and dragons were enemies? There was no point in the entry where that was important. As for the relation to the theme, I question what character was the focus. If it was the demon, well that’s what demons do. They kill and betray human beings. I think you were using humans as the focus because why would they choose demons to crucify someone? Wouldn’t they do it themselves so they would get the right guy? Anyway, great job!
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