Apologies for the clumsy feedback, I rushed through it too quickly and did not notice the typos while failing to connect things properly.
Your words are used correctly, I was just reflecting about my own life and revealing why I disliked wordiness, and it was wrong of me to overlook that part of the feedback. But you're right, the wordiness is not overly used, and overall acceptable considering how you develop the story. Speaking of the context of the story, it looks like I did not grasp it entirely. To the best of my memory, when I had gone off to change my car's tires I had become cranky, and in my thoughts I churned what happened in the story to what I thought had happened and became lost.
Upon the little revelation, the idea of the unity during twilight is a nice light at the end of the diverse darkness.
Well, no worries about the late response, I'm not on good terms with control. Slow and steady wins the race after all, something I should learn about.
Until next time I suppose.
09-Jul-2012 08:34:09