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Xui

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A truely epic Story to read, a real pleasure to read. If you'd like to read my Prologue here is the quick find code:
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13-Jul-2010 21:16:38 - Last edited on 13-Jul-2010 21:16:55 by Xui

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Thank you, Yrolg, for being so understanding. You're epic, and I owe you one. ^_^

QuestsLord: I wouldn't really suggest advertising on someone else's story thread unless you have permission, and if you do, I'm at fault for interfering.

13-Jul-2010 21:46:14 - Last edited on 13-Jul-2010 21:46:29 by [#BPN2TQMFI]

Yrolg

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I quite agree with I Am Regeena. I don't advertise on others' threads and I expect the same of mine. The only instance where I wouldn't mind would be a review requesting mutual feedback.
Please remove the Quick Find Code from your post.

13-Jul-2010 21:57:10

Yrolg

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Dark Enmity,
My opinion is that during periods of the highest liberality, the greatest variation in literature may be found. In these, there are a multitude of poorly constructed books, but there are also a few which satisfy the reader's craving. I am of the opinion that most successful and enjoyable stories are members of the liberal literature; this is not to say all liberal stories are enjoyable. This, paradoxically, is also not to say that all enjoyable stories are liberal. It is merely a generality defined by the consistency with which liberal stories are enjoyable.
To help clarify the idea of liberality, I'd like to define in a broad sense the idea of "social norm" and "originality". Social norm is merely the accepted form of newly created literature and originality is the quality of creating [or attempting to create] a new social norm. Books need not be entirely original to be considered liberal; they must merely defy, or attempt to redefine, the idea of social normalcy. Indeed, I believe it was some ancient Greek philosopher or Shakespeare who said that there are only really five stories to be told; the art is not in the story but in telling the story. I think this is slightly true.
I think the idea that someone was the first to develop a genre to have a 'depth' is ludicrous, unless you're talking about a society. Stephen King was not the first to utilize depth in horror stories; nor was Poe, when he fancied their use. The depth of the horror is what makes the genre exciting; without it, it shall not have survived. (On the idea of sub-plots, I think this is a vague term. By the definition usually employed, I think Poe did consistently utilize them).

13-Jul-2010 21:57:29

Yrolg

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Also, formula fiction is not in the style: it is in the story. Stephen King probably uses a unique style, which is perfectly suitable to a writer of his caliber. If I were to guess, the style is his own. The stories, however, are not. Do remember that even if he were the creator of the genre, or its depth, his volume of work has established a regular pattern of storytelling that elicits no sense of uniqueness or originality.
Whether or not I think any living authors have created works that will be "timeless classics" is an interesting and dubious question. What determines a work's future is both the present and the future, and I have no control over the future. For the most part, the most famous are the ones who, in their publication's time, were unpopular. I therefore doubt that I shall have knowledge of the more "timeless" pieces.
Pieces that will be timeless classics but don't quite yet qualify are: The Lord of the Rings (which I don't much care for), And Then There Were None (which is one of my favorites), The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe (on which I am indifferent), and To Kill a Mockingbird. I'm sure that something by Mitch Albom (Tuesdays with Morrie and The Five People You Meet in Heaven) will be popular, but I've only read parts of the latter, none of the former. Catch-22 will indubitably make it. Orwell's dead, but recent enough that I can mention that he will be infamous for more than a single book, as will John Steinbeck. Ayn Rand will be remembered for many novels, but probably most for Atlas Shrugged. The Ender's Game saga will likely be famous for a long time yet, but I don't know about "timeless"ness.

13-Jul-2010 21:57:42

Yrolg

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I like to keep a rather solid twenty years between my picks and the current day. I can tell you who my favorites are, but I shy from announcing them as candidates for "timeless classics" without this buffer to study.

13-Jul-2010 21:58:02 - Last edited on 14-Jul-2010 05:04:34 by Yrolg

Looksavebee

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Hey Yrolg! Doing my bit now.
Firstly, I absolutely loved your introduction. Though it wasn’t part of the story (was it?) it was a great read. Drew me in straight away to the mood of the opening chapter. Which brings me to another point – I have been trolling through the forums for quite a while, as I have been a non-member without the ability to post (until they changed it down to 500 total level). What I remember of you is your use of words... very large and often confusing. This is hardly the case with your writing. Every word knows its place, like you spent an age selecting every word before moving onto the next. Words such as naïveté, zephyresque and deitous all fit the bill perfectly, admittedly once I found out what they meant *Laughs*.
Speaking of which, that opening paragraph was beautiful. As is most of the first chapter. The only bit I did*’t enjoy was the use of brackets. Personally, I try to avoid them, as I feel it kills the flow a bit. In the case of the crows, wouldn’t just putting it in between dashes be more effective? Just my opinion. Oh, proofread some of your grammar after speech. Some have missing capitals and whatnot. And about the censor... isn’t the only reason that apostrophes get censored is because of some sort of disagreement the forums have with Word? I remember that just deleting the apostrophes and replacing them seems to rectify the problem. No biggy, though.
Laurana’s feverish worship is really interesting to listen to. It’s actually the best description of madness I’ve ever seen written. Me likey.

15-Jul-2010 03:10:34

Looksavebee

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Here’s another little grating I have with your story, though it’s not a terrible one (or at least I think so...). Sometimes I feel like your description is a little... obtrusive? It’s useful for bring the suspense to a peak (Damn censor...), but sometimes it’s just “Please, get on with it”. Again, it’s not a biggy and I’ve really only come across it once. Something to keep in mind, though?
Overall, I have to say I really enjoyed Lunar Eclipse so far. What I really want to know is how it will end. I have a feeling it is nowhere near complete, but I shall be staying tuned. I can haz more update? Oh, on a side note. I really enjoyed your debate with Kyle. It was amazing on both sides *Laughs*
P.S: Reference for grammar after speech: Post 6, Page 1. There’s a couple in there.

15-Jul-2010 03:11:01 - Last edited on 15-Jul-2010 03:11:25 by Looksavebee

Yrolg

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To give you an idea, the last posted chapter was the end of the introduction. Next is the beginning.

Where was that one instance of obtrusive description? (If it was in Chapter III, please say so and afterwards ignore it. I wrote that chapter as part of a NaNoWriMo activity and I dislike it severely.)
May I also inquire about the brackets you referenced? I searched all throughout the first chapter and couldn't find any brackets near crows.

Which part of Laurana's worship did you like? I believe Chapter II and IV have her acting a bit odd.

Also, and most importantly, I think, did you find the last chapter distracting? It was the greatest diversion from my original intention, and I'm worried that the necessary exposition was a bit boring.
PS I'm always up for a nice literary debate. Most would say that I am too obstinate to change with it, but I have found a deeper appreciation of a few stories and mediums after a hearty debate. So if you're ever in the mood for a discussion about something literary, I'm here.

15-Jul-2010 03:51:43 - Last edited on 15-Jul-2010 04:01:38 by Yrolg

Yrolg

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The ending to Chapter II has been changed to better fit the rest of the story. It is now consistent with the future plot and less obstructive to understanding of the Usha family. The motif was made consistent.

15-Jul-2010 04:09:19

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