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“You; I want you to get to Dr. Stuller’s office, and get him to come here. We’ll need to make sure that nothing else is wrong with Mr. Usha.” Janelle responded.
“Let me go. I want to go*****. Usha continued, bellicose and belligerent. He struggled under Janelle*s strangling restraints, attempting to turn and sit up.
“As I said****. Usha, you need to rest now. If you continue ta struggle you’ll cause yourself---hello, Ms. Laurana. How are you this morning?” Janelle responded, abruptly stopping to recognize the uneasy presence of Laurana, who stood at the base of the nearby stairway in a violaceous robe. Janelle immediately ceased her restrictions on Eirel, and focused instead on preventing some major misfortune from occurring. She certainly did not want Laurana thinking some deranged plot, perhaps infidelity, and causing a ruckus when Janelle was so close to her weekend.
“Good morning, mistress. I am quite well, thank you.” Laurana responded in her airy, and slow drawl, putting emphasis on every syllable. “What is wrong with my husband?” she proceeded to ask, haughtily looking at the air above Janelle*s now standing figure.
“He drank too much last night. He’s recovering, and has a hangover. I don’t know if he’s completely sober yet, so I’m attemptin’ to keep him from much danger, Miss.” Responded Janelle, slightly curt, yet maintaining an air of polite apathy in her voice. It would never do to have Ms. Usha riled up before a weekend; undoubtedly the maids would be further needed past the week, once Laurana reached the inevitable fit she was preparing for.

21-Dec-2008 19:16:36

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Did he drink too much last night? I don’t recall.* Laurana responded. “ All that I seem to remember consists of a butler—one of your friends perhaps?—pitching endless amounts of liquor at my husband; indubitably in an attempt to wring some money out of the ordeal, I think.” Whilst finishing her point, she had begun to approach Janelle, folding her arms into the deeply gridelin robe, and slowly moving her chin down to face her maid, scowl quickly coming to her call.
“Now, Ms. Usha, you mus*’t rile yourself. Please, keep calm.” Janelle responded, backing towards the entryway, and groping behind her, perhaps to find the door-handle before Laurana had the chance to get to her rant—get to Janelle.
“Perhaps it was Asetré; he’s always been after my money.” Laurana continued, growing in both her rant, and in her demeanor; she was now waving her arms about in speculatory patterns, inventing new tales with each grand gesture. “Or that servant we got rid of last week, come back to take advantage of our hospitality—and our MONEY!” she continued, ending this statement with a shriek. “The fiends—cowards—hideous monstrosities. I can’t stand any of them. They’re after me, and I won’t have it!” She had now finished her descent of the stairs, and was fast marching upon Janelle, nearly at her husband’s incapacitated body.
“And you,” she said, pointing a peremptory finger at Janelle. “You were in on it all. Giving information, giving secrets, hints, access. You caused it all! You turned my husband into that decrepit mass, that insubstantial sorry excuse for a person! It was you! GUARDS! GUARDS! Come help me! This woman, she’s here, and trying to pry an old woman’s last family from her; trying to rip the last seam of the Usha’s fabric. GUARDS!” Laurana was now passed the small table which stood by the doorway, and was leaving the house, in pursuit of this woman.

21-Dec-2008 19:17:02

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“You thief! You fiend! You’ll never be welcome back into this house! You shall never again find kinship amongst those who call themselves your friends, you conniving little beast! Flee back to your shack in the woods, you odious animal! You horrible little woman. Trying to tear apart my family.” Laurana sunk back into the doorway, settling down upon the floor and setting her head upon her hands. Now crying, she continued to mumble the last part of the sentence for a better part of an hour, unable to rid herself of the phantom of her inebriation, the fiend of her insanity.
She fell asleep, then, just inside the threshold, curled into a tightly wound ball of emotional sobs, just underneath the doorway’* busts of Zalyttera, with the painted seagulls behind it. In the rapidly dimming light, Laurana unwound herself, and forced a glance upon the portrait. From the strained luminescence of the adjoining dining room, only the black and ridiculous forms of crows were to be found, dancing in mockery upon the fabric.

21-Dec-2008 19:17:28 - Last edited on 10-Mar-2009 03:01:59 by Yrolg

Cozmic

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Great! Your Vocabulary is unbelievably good, your description of the death and the aftermath is chilling, and your spelling is nearly perfect, except for a single place where you use the word "The" instead of "Their". One of the best stories I have ever read, and it really makes you wonder, "What will happen next."In chapter II your story continues it's wonderfully excruciating suspense. The description of the woman's grief is wonderful, and the suspense is mounting. The storm gives a nice affect as well, magnifying the distress and uncertainty.

02-Jan-2009 21:29:09

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