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Smok Taunter

Smok Taunter

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Alright, I finished the story :) . And I must say it's very good. Some of the chapters could do with some lengthoning. Perhaps add some charcter development so we become attracted to the charcters. But in general I thought the chapters were a tad short with the exception of those in part 2.

18-Feb-2008 16:23:19

easygoingEZ

easygoingEZ

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I just finished the first page and I must say it's very very exciting! I'm going to work my way through it later, but now I have to get dinner. The only suggestion I'd have is to try and vary some words a bit, instead of repeating them (example: the small hill near the small village). It would just make for a tad spiced up writing, but other than that, very nice! ^_^

21-Feb-2008 00:05:38

Dragon7350

Dragon7350

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They say you get better the more you write
after writing so many stories, do you think you are better at writing than when you began you're first story?
Just wondering...and bump
*Dreams keep good men sane, but can ruin even the most righteous of them...*

22-Feb-2008 17:25:42

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