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Azi Demonica said :
I don't see how ten combatants is a battle. Magnulfus won't be able to fight nine foes simultaneously.

No, but isn't it a bit convenient how Mannulfus was polite enough to let the one guy who wasn't paying attention finish his speech before he was pounced on?

Azi Demonica said :
The knights have been to earth before, they were at earth fighting Magnulfus before he came, so they have an idea what modern clothing looks like, and so the knight assumes the kids are Koray.

I still don't understand how, in a world where all mages are hunted and killed, the government actively deploys knights with teleportation magic to hunt down magical users. This is a world where the King's guard turned on him and killed him the moment he decided he didn't want to kill a Koray. It's a world where it was totally legal for the new King to kill his brother, take the throne for himself, and everyone was totally okay with it, on the basis that magic users should be murdered at any cost.

As for them immediately identifying Gary and Alisha as a Koray, do they just assume all people from Earth are Koray? How do they know they weren't two random people who happened to be sucked through the portal?

Azi Demonica said :
It's not a speech, it's a paragraph of dialogue.

It's pretty close to a speech, actually. Try saying what you wrote out loud. It's way too long a dialogue for someone who is currently dying and in the middle of combat.

Sorry if this seems like too much of a nitpick, but it always irritates me when people have their characters deliver long-winded speeches and dialogue in a situation where they either don't have the time to say all that, or whoever they are speaking to isn't going to wait for them to finish.

(continued) Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

25-Jan-2017 01:38:50 - Last edited on 25-Jan-2017 01:41:43 by NotFishing

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Azi Demonica said :
This is meant to trigger the two users into starting to get into your storyline; if Gary and Alisha recall their mark, they may be curious and start thinking about just that.

Please stop trying to direct other people's characters. I don't want all this information spoonfed to Gary by some random knight in the middle of the woods. I'd prefer to have him stumble across the major characters and learn from them. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

25-Jan-2017 01:40:08 - Last edited on 25-Jan-2017 01:40:32 by NotFishing

Azi Demonica

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Magnulfus knocked down one knight, then went back to fighting the ones still on their feet and trying to stab him to death; he isn't gonna bother with one who fell over and dropped his dagger.

The government didn't send knights, unless you say so. OK.

They did not identity them as Koray, one knight assumed so. No, they do not assume all people from earth are Koray, as Koray refers to people born during the Ember Moon, which presumably only occurs in this fantasy world. They don't, one is assuming so.

No, it isn't, it's too short. This took me about twenty seconds to read through. He isn't dying in combat, he was knocked down, ignored, and then spoke to the teenagers.

Doesn't bother me.

I don't see any of this happening anytime soon considering what's going on.

25-Jan-2017 02:07:11

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Azi Demonica said :
Magnulfus knocked down one knight, then went back to fighting the ones still on their feet and trying to stab him to death; he isn't gonna bother with one who fell over and dropped his dagger.

Except he did bother with him though, only after he finished his speech.

Azi Demonica said :
The government didn't send knights, unless you say so. OK.

You said they were loyal to the King, so you can't blame me for reaching that conclusion.

Azi Demonica said :
They did not identity them as Koray, one knight assumed so. No, they do not assume all people from earth are Koray, as Koray refers to people born during the Ember Moon, which presumably only occurs in this fantasy world. They don't, one is assuming so.

Again, I don't know why one knight would make that assumption. Wouldn't his attention be drawn more towards the fight than the neutral strangers who are only trying to escape and aren't harming anyone?

Azi Demonica said :
No, it isn't, it's too short. This took me about twenty seconds to read through. He isn't dying in combat, he was knocked down, ignored, and then spoke to the teenagers.

Twenty seconds is actually a really long time for someone to stop in the context of this scenario.

Also you literally just said he was dying.

Azi Demonica said :
I don't see any of this happening anytime soon considering what's going on.

Wolf literally just mentioned there were plans to have Gary encounter Aylin. But either way, it really isn't your responsibility. It feels like you're trying to rush things along. And this really isn't a good time for exposition - Gary has just been thrust into another dimension and landed in the middle of a fight, which he is trying to escape from, and now two different people are trying to talk to him. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

25-Jan-2017 02:24:22 - Last edited on 25-Jan-2017 02:34:59 by NotFishing

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Yes, after the speeech.

Wolf mentioned first that the Obsidian Knights were loyal to the king, and he being the thread master, I went along with it.

Of course you don't, you're not their creator. It's not easy to fight when your head's been punctured by spikes. His monologue was attempted to respond to Alisha's question.

In armoured combat, half a minute can go really slowly when you're tired and fighting multiples.

Yes, the knight is dying, but not dying in combat, he dies after being hit again later on.

Yes, I recall reading that. I'm not, I was addressing Alisha's question, trying to do my part to support the role-play. None of the knights are going to kill Gary, I will make sure they don't, don't worry.

25-Jan-2017 02:50:16

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Wolf said the knights were loyal to the king.

As in not your special homemade fire knights, but the knights/soldiers that have chased Miles, Talia, Annie and Aylin, plus the bunch in the camp.

I think what Fish is trying to say, Azi, is that he doesn't want to be babied by random NPC number 7 who you introduced on a dime for no strong reason. He doesn't want to experience a long-winded speech from a man who dies literally seconds later, he wants to experience the roleplay naturally. Organically. I am Inferi.

25-Jan-2017 03:09:04 - Last edited on 25-Jan-2017 03:11:03 by George Rozas

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Just as she began to speak, another person began to appear, bringing with him Knights, Knights who she could tell we're loyal to the king.

I don't know if that's what Fish is trying to say. My strong reason was passion and excitement. He doesn't have to if he doesn't want to.

25-Jan-2017 03:17:35

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