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NotFishing

NotFishing

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Azi, I have to say I'm really confused here.

Is the knight taking the time to dish out this exposition in the middle of a battle that rages around him? And is he yelling it across the battlefield? My understanding is that Gary and Alisha are quite some distance away.

And how would he notice this mark on Gary's wrist, when:
A) Gary is standing some distance away.
B) Gary is wearing a hoodie that probably conceals it under the sleeve.

It just seems out of place to stop mid-fight to start saying this to some random stranger. It's not even a sentence or two; it is a full-blown speech. And he has no way of knowing that Gary is a Koray.
Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

24-Jan-2017 23:58:24 - Last edited on 24-Jan-2017 23:59:53 by NotFishing

Azi Demonica

Azi Demonica

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Not,
I don't see how ten combatants is a battle. Magnulfus won't be able to fight nine foes simultaneously. There isn't a battlefield; he could be yelling, I don't know. I don't know how far away Alisha drove, but she ran over two knights and stopped shortly after; I presume so due to the nature of forested areas, which mean there's trees everywhere, so I assume she was not able to drive too far.

He didn't notice Gary's mark. The knight knows that Magnulfus is a Koray, alluding to the backstory I already typed out, but is assuming the kids to be Koray. The knights have been to earth before, they were at earth fighting Magnulfus before he came, so they have an idea what modern clothing looks like, and so the knight assumes the kids are Koray.

The knight is dying, his skull was pierced and clubbed, he's not thinking straight, but feeling bad for the fear the teenagers had to endure, in his dying breaths, the knight, being a knight as so chivalrous and merciful to the enemy, wants to help them however he can. It's not a speech, it's a paragraph of dialogue. He doesn't know Gary is a Koray, he assumes so, because he did not see Gary while fighting Magnulfus on earth. This is meant to trigger the two users into starting to get into your storyline; if Gary and Alisha recall their mark, they may be curious and start thinking about just that.

Alternatively, everyone can simply dismiss it and move on without further ado.

25-Jan-2017 00:46:28

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