“...hill below the castle was too steep to look down without actually leaving the walls.”
Couldn’t he just lean over the walls? Sometimes, parapets would have an extension, basically a horizontal platform going outward from the walls, though to build such a thing beside a cliff wouldn’t be easy.
“As the two men moved through the opening they saw citizens and Silmi soldiers lined up against walls, crossbow quarrels lodged in their chests, heads and necks.*
Executions did not use ranged means, people and prisoners of war were simply cut down.
“his food, bow, quiver, and sword were all hung around the horse's rear end.”
Equipment was slung at the back and sides of the saddle, though the above works too.
I feel you could have expanded the scene for the first pass for the scouts. Not saying you have to, but it’d would have been a good read.
Your knights get scared easily, even sprinting people scare them. When Guyard arrives there isn’t much description about the battle, it was something I was waiting for.
Anyways, I finished reading up to page 4 from chapter two. Storytelling is good but action is a bit brief, and a big guy ripping a man in half seemingly in a matter of seconds is a bit off but oh well. I’m not sure if I already did this, but I’ll give you a few links that may help in some expansion. Of course none of these are real people killing each other, but they offer a semi-realistic “idea” that may help in the combat scenes. Just copy paste the title into the YouTube command line, I hope this helps.
http://***.youtube.***/watch?v=jAAFczOyLVo&feature=related
Military Designs from Talhoffer's Medieval Combat Manual
http://***.youtube.***/watch?v=mCL8ONmOKBw
Battle of Nations 2012 02-05-12 21 21 1 fight Poland-USA
http://***.youtube.***/watch?v=1zGjex6qDtM
Vyborg castle medieval mass *****
http://***.youtube.***/watch?v=G4k-vjdeZO4&feature=related
SwArta Harnischfechten
http://***.youtube.***/watch?v=lvkPLvoH1vI&feature=related
Twirch Ringen (Updated)
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