Dreamweaver:
You're welcome to post any time, of course.
Comments are always nice, especially from you. I very much enjoy your writing (I've read all your stories, you should write more, lol).
Chuk: Sorry! Lol. I edited that, though I'm not sure it’s any better now. Upon reading it when you mentioned it, I didn't even recognize it as from Synergy - I must've written it in my sleep. *.x
You're correct; it very much upset the flow. Thanks.
I got into the habit of starting a new line for every sentence at some point, unsure when. But I know I can't stand big blocks of text, so I think it's better than clumping relatively non-related sentences into huge paragraphs, etc...I'll work on compounding them, though.
As for your question, the Den is supposed to be magical, though that isn't said directly in the story. I had hoped that the fact that the fox can talk would imply such, but I'm afraid the detail was left unaccounted for nonetheless...
As for over description, I don't think it's really such a bad thing to describe - some people enjoy that style. On the other hand, I have noted a few places in my stories where I describe things which are fairly trivial in regards to the story, which is sometimes annoying to the reader. I have already sorted out a few instances of this, and I'll continue to proof read and keep that in mind. Thanks.
As for being a mentor, I did talk to Elite about that. He said if the need arose, that I could mentor somebody who needs a basic teacher. As for keeping you as a mentor, I'd appreciate it if we left that as is - when you get time it's still nice to get a little constructive feedback, which you exemplified in your previous post.
Thanks for your vote of confidence, though.
28-Apr-2010 16:37:46
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Logan Shafts