Forums

¥ The Poetry Corner ¥

Quick find code: 49-50-424-60566576

Amoraten

Amoraten

Posts: 2,774 Adamant Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
Thanks Yrolg for the feedback as always :D
I use far too many of these *smiley* things. Revision is a difficult process but I agree- it is necessary especially in a poetic sense, I will finish my entire piece before revising the same (it would seem to make sense to do so).
Have you thought perhaps presenting Sylvia Plath vs Ted Hughes on the thread? The story of their life is probably one of the most interesting stories that can be told and the difference in their poetry entangled in a midst of their relationship can show how life experience can frame the basis of their poetry.

27-Apr-2010 23:39:05 - Last edited on 27-Apr-2010 23:40:05 by Amoraten

The contents of this message have been hidden.

27-Apr-2010 23:42:13

Kotane

Kotane

Posts: 7,110 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
Thanks yrolg, i appreciate your take on my poem, and i must say i agree. I wrote this a while back so i think a new poem is in order.
I call this the INVERTED HAIKU OF GEMS.
I was quite inspired by runescape and the haikus on this thread when i wrote this. Enjoy!

Ruby red crimson dreaming
Vortex in plain sight
Now the blood drips, possibly.
Sapphire blue teardrops fall
Mirrors in my eyes.
I see crying, dost thou know?
Emerald green natrue's praising
Crisp plants blowing soft
Comfort is me, and I sigh.
Diamond drags the soul of greed
Shiny facets blaze.
But the shine blinds my bright eyes.
Onyx black darkness changes
Vortex disappears.
I see thou, thou understands.
This is actually my first poem resembling haiku. I know haiku is 5-7-5 but i wanted to try 7-5-7 as an alternative.

28-Apr-2010 01:27:22

Yrolg

Yrolg

Posts: 25,296 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
The Japanese words always escape me, but I believe there is a style similar to that. Although, it might in fact be 7-5-7-7.
I couldn't possibly give you the name though. :p


mrscrewup,
Hello. This is a poetry thread. You should focus all of your posts either on helping others with their poetry or improving your own understanding of the art. Irrelevant prose is not welcomed here, and it is treated as spam.
Please reconsider your actions before posting here further.

28-Apr-2010 04:46:39 - Last edited on 28-Apr-2010 04:47:58 by Yrolg

The contents of this message have been hidden.

28-Apr-2010 05:38:26

The contents of this message have been hidden.

28-Apr-2010 05:38:44

Mod Kathy

Mod Kathy

Jagex Moderator Forum Profile Posts by user
Hi mrscrewup and IIlllIIIIIII,
If you aren't interested in taking part in this topic properly then there is no reason to post here. There are plenty of threads around, I'm sure you can find some that interest you.
=Kathy=

28-Apr-2010 21:46:56

Yrolg

Yrolg

Posts: 25,296 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
Thanks, Mod Kathy. I hope I remember next time I log in that I have some interesting propositions and a bit of feedback for you. :)
Logan Shafts,
It's alright. Let's not make a habit out of being off-topic, however. :p

28-Apr-2010 22:57:34

Quick find code: 49-50-424-60566576 Back to Top