I've only read little bits so far but overall it looks good and fits in with the current style of quests, I've noticed a few things that might need changing to make it more lore-friendly.
Post 2 page 3, I'm not sure about mentioning toilets, as mentioned in the quest "the feud" The only problem is that no one has ever actually seen a toilet in RuneScape.
Post 7 page 7, is not lore correct since the release of The World Wakes.
11-Feb-2014 22:25:45