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Chosen Worf

Chosen Worf

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If you are suggesting that the story may not be up to par, then I will take my chances. I'd prefer to hear what a respected reviewer like yourself has to say and improve than remain at the status quo.
If that isn't the case, then I'm not sure what you mean.

01-Jul-2012 03:51:16

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Emperor Worf,
Unfortunately your application was not accepted. It did not meet the criteria outlined in the beginning of this thread. Because Yrolg's Reviews is now accepting applications from the public until July 9th, you may resubmit a corrected application before this date. Please note that because your original application did not adhere to the guidelines set up in the beginning of the thread, this may put your piece at a disadvantage for being selected for a review; it will not, however, affect the actual review itself.
If you have any questions please feel free to post them.
~Yrolg

01-Jul-2012 20:03:18

Areno3

Areno3

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I understand everything in the review besides "How do you want your review formatted?" You already have a rubric present, so I'm unsure as to what you're hinting at. Are you talking about the review itself and whether I want it short, long, or incredibly detailed? If so, that makes more sense.
After this question is answered, I will submit an application. I must go help my aunt move though, so I shall do so later.

01-Jul-2012 20:59:21

Chuk

Chuk

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"Just here for moral support at this moment. Hopefully I can provide some feedback soon. Would you be willing to engage in a perhaps weekly joint topic, where we both take the same idea and craft 500-800 words on it? I don't have the time to commit to doing it every day, but I think once a week for a month or so is definitely doable.
I sort of like the challenge of not being able to pick my own topic."
- -- - -- - -- - -- - -- -
I know this was directed at Xen, but since he seems to have vanished again, I'd be interested in doing something like this if you're still game. Feel free to get in touch with me on any of my threads if you don't feel like clogging up your review thread. But I'll check back here as well.

02-Jul-2012 02:15:59 - Last edited on 02-Jul-2012 02:17:52 by Chuk

Chosen Worf

Chosen Worf

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Application:
Username: Emperor Worf
Story Title: When Breathing Stops
Quick Find Code: 49-50-711-63788458
Type of Story: Short Story, finished.
Length: Two posts.
How would you like your review formatted*? Rubric first, then your comments, I suppose. The order really isn't too important to me.
May I post this review on your story's thread?: Yes.
Literary Tools: 112/140
--Description: 25/30
--Voice: 17/25
--Symbolism: 20/25
--Depth: 17/20
--Analysis: 18/20
--Word Choice: 15/20

Structure: 110/120
--Format: 35/40
--Grammar: 28/30
--Usage: 18/20
--Sentence Configuration: 14/15
--Basics: 15/15
Plot: 53/75
--Development: 18/30
--Intricacy: 10/15
--Consistency: 15/15
--Originality: 10/15
Other: 81/90
--Impact: 17/20
--Flow: 19/20
--Conclusion: 14/15
--Theme: 14/15
--Empathetic Ties: 8/10
--Title Relevance: 9/10

02-Jul-2012 15:25:41 - Last edited on 03-Jul-2012 15:39:39 by Chosen Worf

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Emperor Worf,
Your application has been received and will be adjudged on July 9th. In the meantime, please remove the last two lines (especially concerning your score). This is to protect the integrity of the thread's application security measures.
Thank you, and good luck!
--Yrolg

03-Jul-2012 03:53:39 - Last edited on 04-Jul-2012 07:38:38 by Yrolg

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Delnaz,
Hello. If you read through the first fifty posts, you will see that I have two formats of review:
1. FEEDBACK. This style consists of pieces of feedback that will help you improve on specific areas of a certain piece. It is a review more of a particular story than your styles as an author.
2. CRITIQUE. This style consists of a review of your piece, with general statements about your style as an author. It contains more critical language and is more quotable on the front pages of threads.
Both reviews are accompanied by a days-long clinic in which I help you one-on-one to answer any questions you have and implement any suggestions of mine that you've taken to heart. I enjoy doing both -- critiques probably more because they are quicker to complete -- but each style is for a different purpose.
If you have any further questions, please let me know.
--Yrolg

03-Jul-2012 03:57:33

Yrolg

Yrolg

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iChuck,
Hello. Can we perhaps discuss this in-game or on my Omnibus? The main use for my Omnibus is for endeavours like these.
Nevertheless, I do look forward to engaging in some creative writing with you. It will be nice to get back into the swing of authorship.
--Yrolg

03-Jul-2012 04:01:40

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