RuneScape Forum Archive | Dragons of Surdaus

WintryElf

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ELFIE'S NOTES:
Excellent story, very well crafted and masterfully finished - high praise there. As I've pointed out, I really disliked your continued use of the same adjectives, I almost knew how you'd describe someone without even reading. I enjoyed your characters, but sometimes Aaron would have very deep, powerful insights for a ten-year-old, and that made me wonder. It was decently captivating. Modest marks there.

YOUR FINAL MARKS:
Characters: 14/20
Setting: 18/20
Description: 19/20
Plot: 20/20
Captivation: 13/20
FINAL MARK: 83% on Doom level. That's an achievement - congratulations!

07-Apr-2009 04:02:08 - Last edited on 07-Apr-2009 05:20:00 by WintryElf

xxDkreignxx

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How the heck did you attach that to the Lethrblaka? I was thinking more like the Fanghur when I first read that bio.... It looks nothing like that; it just looks like a dragon with a leathery hide, nothing more.
I use 3-dot ellipses when the statement isn't finished; I use 4 when I think a period would be too bland an ending.
Yes, that should make you wonder... though I won't say why; I don't want to give away that part.
I couldn't think of a synonym for pants!
Thanks

EDIT: Eldest

07-Apr-2009 04:40:16 - Last edited on 07-Apr-2009 05:27:33 by xxDkreignxx

WintryElf

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Fanghur... I've heard that before. It sounds Lord-of-the-Ringsy, but I can't place it. Where's that from?
Also, no problem

07-Apr-2009 05:18:46

WintryElf

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Gah! Those creatures one of the dwarven clans is named after? The sheep-stealing ones? ^_^

07-Apr-2009 05:43:32

xxDkreignxx

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Goats -.- But yes.
And there's an edit button. Please

EDIT: Btw, Maereth's bio is on Page 18.

07-Apr-2009 05:48:51 - Last edited on 10-Apr-2009 01:41:46 by xxDkreignxx

Hraehaukr

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Bookmark. Great as far as I've read.

10-Apr-2009 20:15:28

FelisVulpes

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woah ho ho!!! i only read up to chapter four and i didn't take my eyes of it until then o.O absolutely top notch, i'de give it 9/10 so far.
(I absolutely LOVE dragons!)

11-Apr-2009 09:40:50 - Last edited on 11-Apr-2009 09:41:22 by FelisVulpes

FelisVulpes

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Fanghur = the less intelligent, smaller, leathery cousins of dragons.
Feldúno*t = a large species of mountain goat native to the Beor Mountains, Dwarfs like to use these as steeds as they are too small for horses and ponys do not live in their mountains.

God i'm good...

12-Apr-2009 11:53:06