And...Caydock hasn't actually finished reading this story, so someone needs to give him a nudge
Basically, I read this story again, and just got really absorbed by certain parts. What do you think of the below, Ruben?
"He would live, but he would miss them greatly. If he couldn’t have both, he would rather choose Tyler, and forget that he was a prince. Before him lay a treacherous path, should he decide to drop the pretence, the mask he was forced to wear. But were these thoughts and predictions too negative and grim to be Edward’s? Was there a taint of his brother’s melancholy? Of course, there might be positive outcomes should he tell his father the truth…"
--Was this a bit obvious as some kind of foreshadowing of the epilogue, particularly the last part?
"To Edward, writing is for fools who simply want to make communications easier, and cowards who want to evade the reality."
--Does it seem like what Edward truly think?
"He was shocked, immediately disgusted by the scene, or the concept, and went on to do the thing he did. Ronny was as bad as everybody else. And, just like everybody else, Ronny was a religious bigot, and unforgivable. No amount of words, spoken or written, would ever change his mind."
--Was the last sentence unnecessary on Ronny's part?
"Funnily enough, I’d almost forgotten my dirty little secret, and so when the diggers told me they found a little casket, I ordered it to be disposed of, then called them back after I’d realised what it could be."
--Haha, what do you think of the casket thing?
And I read the epilogue again. I swear, the final moments in this story never failed to move me as a writer, even though I've read it for like a hundred times lol.
Basically, I read this story again, and just got really absorbed by certain parts. What do you think of the below, Ruben?
"He would live, but he would miss them greatly. If he couldn’t have both, he would rather choose Tyler, and forget that he was a prince. Before him lay a treacherous path, should he decide to drop the pretence, the mask he was forced to wear. But were these thoughts and predictions too negative and grim to be Edward’s? Was there a taint of his brother’s melancholy? Of course, there might be positive outcomes should he tell his father the truth…"
--Was this a bit obvious as some kind of foreshadowing of the epilogue, particularly the last part?
"To Edward, writing is for fools who simply want to make communications easier, and cowards who want to evade the reality."
--Does it seem like what Edward truly think?
"He was shocked, immediately disgusted by the scene, or the concept, and went on to do the thing he did. Ronny was as bad as everybody else. And, just like everybody else, Ronny was a religious bigot, and unforgivable. No amount of words, spoken or written, would ever change his mind."
--Was the last sentence unnecessary on Ronny's part?
"Funnily enough, I’d almost forgotten my dirty little secret, and so when the diggers told me they found a little casket, I ordered it to be disposed of, then called them back after I’d realised what it could be."
--Haha, what do you think of the casket thing?
And I read the epilogue again. I swear, the final moments in this story never failed to move me as a writer, even though I've read it for like a hundred times lol.
28-Oct-2010 20:36:05 - Last edited on 27-Jan-2011 18:23:50 by Englishkid62
