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So...you didn't like the brother thing?
As for the 'why', it is quite apparent in the stories themselves: the society in which we live is quite an unfair one.
As for the 'why', it is quite apparent in the stories themselves: the society in which we live is quite an unfair one.
04-Sep-2010 11:14:14
Nope, I didn't say that. I truly liked the story, but I have to say The Priceless was better.
This story captures the complex nature of two brothers who have never been alike. I congratulate you for doing such a thing.
Truly a work of art, and quite a long read for sure!
This story captures the complex nature of two brothers who have never been alike. I congratulate you for doing such a thing.
Truly a work of art, and quite a long read for sure!
04-Sep-2010 18:14:47
Well, people have their preferences
I'd like to think that this is better than The Priceless because:
1) It has a different tone, particularly the epilogue explained why Ronny was perhaps being condescending and harsh to his younger self when he portrayed himself.
2) The post modernism twist in this is better executed.
3) More romance
4) Voice, syntax and flow is better here.
5) And in terms of themes and ideas, I just think that this touches more issues.
6) Lastly, it does raise questions about what 'writing' is.
Of course, some people just like The Priceless better because of the looping thing, and it has a more depressing impact. But whereas after The Priceless I went onto writing about some guy coming out to his parents and then just left their house once and for all, this story focuses more on the importance of family, and selfishness, of course
...So, the looping thing isn't nearly as skilled to create as a consistent two-layered prose, about what really happened and how Ronny's bias (his desire to justify himself and guilt) clouds the accurate report of events.
I'd like to think that this is better than The Priceless because:
1) It has a different tone, particularly the epilogue explained why Ronny was perhaps being condescending and harsh to his younger self when he portrayed himself.
2) The post modernism twist in this is better executed.
3) More romance
4) Voice, syntax and flow is better here.
5) And in terms of themes and ideas, I just think that this touches more issues.
6) Lastly, it does raise questions about what 'writing' is.
Of course, some people just like The Priceless better because of the looping thing, and it has a more depressing impact. But whereas after The Priceless I went onto writing about some guy coming out to his parents and then just left their house once and for all, this story focuses more on the importance of family, and selfishness, of course
...So, the looping thing isn't nearly as skilled to create as a consistent two-layered prose, about what really happened and how Ronny's bias (his desire to justify himself and guilt) clouds the accurate report of events.
04-Sep-2010 18:26:01 - Last edited on 04-Sep-2010 18:33:10 by Englishkid62
True, true. No doubt though, they are both really good stories that must've taken a lot of time and effort to actually write. They both captivated/enlightened me, and I find your pieces absolutely delightful.
04-Sep-2010 18:56:38
Oh, wow. Thank you
Yeah, they are quite tedious monsters to write. Or else I would've had a dozen stories under my belt, huh?
So how goes your writing?
Yeah, they are quite tedious monsters to write. Or else I would've had a dozen stories under my belt, huh?
So how goes your writing?
04-Sep-2010 19:03:25
Mmm, that doesn't sound easy to write at all
04-Sep-2010 19:08:45
A good mystery is just as good as this story's theme.
So yeah, I hope it's a success.
So yeah, I hope it's a success.
04-Sep-2010 19:09:38
I think it's to do with execution though. I love a good mystery
04-Sep-2010 19:16:27
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