The epilogue isn't completely unexpected though, as I have had hints planted quite early on
20-Aug-2010 22:42:54
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And probably the account or events related maybe a lot less neutral than you might think
20-Aug-2010 22:48:04
Bookmarked.
This'll be nice to read at the airport!
This'll be nice to read at the airport!
20-Aug-2010 22:58:33
Be sure to read the introduction!
20-Aug-2010 22:59:55
After reading the epilogue the reason for the narrator seeming very biased against Ronny makes sense, and also accounts for Ronny's emotions being more detailed.
I find that, in stories that allow the reader to really connect with the characters, there are moments when you think 'If only someone had done that and not that.' This story had several of these, such as 'If only Ronny had followed the cat, none of this would have happened' or 'What if Edward hadn't read the letter?' I think that relating to the characters in the story and understanding their emotions is an essential part of any story, and that this story did exactly that.
Meh, it wouldn't be a proper English story without a sad ending
It was interesting seeing Ronny change as a result of the consequences of his actions, from a selfish child to a king that tries to be fair and just to everyone.
The whole rat eating thing in the cell was slightly...disturbing
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I find that, in stories that allow the reader to really connect with the characters, there are moments when you think 'If only someone had done that and not that.' This story had several of these, such as 'If only Ronny had followed the cat, none of this would have happened' or 'What if Edward hadn't read the letter?' I think that relating to the characters in the story and understanding their emotions is an essential part of any story, and that this story did exactly that.
Meh, it wouldn't be a proper English story without a sad ending
It was interesting seeing Ronny change as a result of the consequences of his actions, from a selfish child to a king that tries to be fair and just to everyone.
The whole rat eating thing in the cell was slightly...disturbing
...
20-Aug-2010 23:43:24 - Last edited on 20-Aug-2010 23:50:23 by Ghastrage718
Thank you.
Yes, I try to do that in my novel, and set up a few 'What if' points around.
But then, someone else told me Ronny was just a fool... lol
Too harsh, maybe.
20-Aug-2010 23:50:00
I guess.
So, how does this rank with my other stories?
So, how does this rank with my other stories?
21-Aug-2010 00:04:27
Hmmm...I would say that your writing has improved, and that this is better than The Priceless. I like them both though
I'll be going now to get some sleep. Nice talking to you
I'll be going now to get some sleep. Nice talking to you
21-Aug-2010 00:15:52 - Last edited on 21-Aug-2010 00:16:50 by Ghastrage718
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