Stream of consciousness while reading:
Intro
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"Psychopomp," though perfectly apt, is one of the most ridiculous words in the English language.
Prologue:
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All your base are belong to us.
Chapter One
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Tryst is a great and under-used word.
Dreams inside dreams? Apparently futuristic space soldiers have watched Inception too.
"Still all he saw was the blackness." I think you've misplaced a comma.
Aurgur is remarkably relaxed and casual, for being a psychopomp. Or maybe all psychopomps are like that; it would certainly justify the name.
Boss? Raise? And this guy places himself in the same domain as valkyries and Anubis? Standards seem to have slipped, at least in the "spiritual intimidation" factor.
Plural of millennium is millennia.
I think three semicolons in one sentence is probably a forum record.
And now, to match the thirty times you've thanked me for allowing you to get your reserves:
You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome. You're welcome.
14-Jul-2011 08:26:57