RuneScape Forum Archive | Crusaders of Zaros

Joebobjoe6

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Ok, that should be about enough space to finish it up, resume posting.
Other comments can be seen on pages 3-6.

10-Apr-2010 01:30:58 - Last edited on 10-Apr-2010 01:31:41 by Joebobjoe6

wiz gromph

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Awsome story man, I just got done reading it. If it wasn't for the spelling/grammar errors it would be 5 stars

15-Apr-2010 00:08:25

Joebobjoe6

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Glad you liked it! yeah, I need to go through and fix those, but I get to eager to write more, and don't always fix what I've already written, but I'm going to fix it all.

15-Apr-2010 06:37:51

otgrejgoiure

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page 7,post 1, 4 lines from the bottom 4th word, should be cant =P, loving it so far
page 7 post 2 chapter 18, line 3 word 3, should be it not is
page 7 post 2 chapter 18, line 7, add there after is
page 7 post 2 chapter 18, line 13, replace to with can

sry if i seem annoying but just tryin to help you out =P
thats all i found, good job man cant wait for next part =D

17-Apr-2010 14:17:02 - Last edited on 17-Apr-2010 14:31:41 by otgrejgoiure

Joebobjoe6

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Thanks! I appreciate all the help I can get lol, glad you liked it, I'm writing more right now.
I've fixed a few of the errors you pointed out, I'll get the rest later, Thanks again!

18-Apr-2010 04:05:18 - Last edited on 18-Apr-2010 04:54:08 by Joebobjoe6

Joebobjoe6

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New chapters up!

18-Apr-2010 04:53:22

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Eri Vi

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Hey, just read part one so far, but it's really good.
Looking through the comments I see that you realise your grammar and spelling isn't quite perfect. One recurring mistake being the word 'thought' ('What should I do' he thought) being spelt 'though'.
Unfortunately I've forgotten the rest of them.

18-Apr-2010 05:30:37