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Hm, I think I learned more of the story from that review. So much better than my own, lol
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Geistig meisterstick.
08-May-2011 01:27:10
--To answer your question, Kipplin and the narrator never met each other in real life. They were only ‘online friends’. To the narrator, Kipplin could well be an ugly sod but the narrator did*’t so much care. I’d like to think of it as a coincidence that David and the narrator went to the same college (btw, in the UK ‘college’ means sixth form, which is when people in the US do AP English Lit etc.), and if Kipplin weren’t so devoted to Runescape, he’d be studying in the same place too. Keeping Kipplin an online, elusive identity makes this story more haunting, I think.
As for the originality…well, I simply detest violence and gore and that kind of thing
. By keeping Runescape as a game and the story focusing on the people behind it, it makes the story more real, don’t you think? It can be much more compelling to the reader if they know that it is plausible this can happen, particularly with the writing tone I have selected for the school ground scenes.
I’m really glad that is has touched you. Over many drafts and revisions, I become immune to the story and often forget its impact on unsuspecting readers. Were you expecting something like this when you began reading? Most people were completely unaware. I recall a couple of individual who was able to shut off their emotions and tell I should see a doctor and read the bible, but the overwhelming majority appreciated the story. I’m really glad that you do, too. While when this story was conceived I was just getting the hang of invoking emotions, this still remained one of my more successful works. Maybe it’s just the story, I don’t know. Here I learned how to tug at a reader’s heart. I hadn’t yet known how to reduce a reader into a sobbing wreck
As for the originality…well, I simply detest violence and gore and that kind of thing
. By keeping Runescape as a game and the story focusing on the people behind it, it makes the story more real, don’t you think? It can be much more compelling to the reader if they know that it is plausible this can happen, particularly with the writing tone I have selected for the school ground scenes.
I’m really glad that is has touched you. Over many drafts and revisions, I become immune to the story and often forget its impact on unsuspecting readers. Were you expecting something like this when you began reading? Most people were completely unaware. I recall a couple of individual who was able to shut off their emotions and tell I should see a doctor and read the bible, but the overwhelming majority appreciated the story. I’m really glad that you do, too. While when this story was conceived I was just getting the hang of invoking emotions, this still remained one of my more successful works. Maybe it’s just the story, I don’t know. Here I learned how to tug at a reader’s heart. I hadn’t yet known how to reduce a reader into a sobbing wreck
08-May-2011 15:46:30
“The coolest thing was where you learn about Alex Kipplin, and the outfit he wears is much like the one his character wears on RuneScape. The personification of his actual appearance on a video game is something that will only be noticed by those who actually know him and his struggles.”
--Haha! I actually did*’t think much of this during the first draft, when this idea was conceived. I simply thought it was a nice idea, and wrote it down. I definitely haven’t anticipated the amount of people who liked this detail.
“The narrator seems to be a mysterious guy. He makes the reader question his past, his motives, and his intentions.”
--I have deliberately kept him fairly mysterious for several artistic choices. In one draft I did*’t even have the narrator named in any way. Having a mysterious narrator, and because the reader is experiencing the story inside his body for the whole duration of 32 posts, he can’t do anything that the reader would not empathise with. Then again, I want to emphasise that this narrator can be anyone. It can even be the reader themselves. What would the reader have done, were they in his position?
“Thank you, English, for writing a story that shows the meaning of love.”
--Well, I thank you for your time, and reviewing this work
Here are some notes and reflections on your review, and for myself as well when I correct it later.
“RuneScape provided an ethereal, fantasy world in which no one would ever tell me what to do.”
To me, it sounds better if it’s an ethereal fantasy world instead of an ethereal, fantasy world. The fantasy world is ethereal, so a comma doesn’t seem necessary.
--The reading voice demanded a pause after ethereal. Just to make it absolutely clear that when readers read it aloud, I want a pause there (Part of the music-making of reading, I guess you could say), I added the comma. It was a stylistic choice.
“Drinking was our passion too. It was fun, it numbed the pain and consciousness.”
--Haha! I actually did*’t think much of this during the first draft, when this idea was conceived. I simply thought it was a nice idea, and wrote it down. I definitely haven’t anticipated the amount of people who liked this detail.
“The narrator seems to be a mysterious guy. He makes the reader question his past, his motives, and his intentions.”
--I have deliberately kept him fairly mysterious for several artistic choices. In one draft I did*’t even have the narrator named in any way. Having a mysterious narrator, and because the reader is experiencing the story inside his body for the whole duration of 32 posts, he can’t do anything that the reader would not empathise with. Then again, I want to emphasise that this narrator can be anyone. It can even be the reader themselves. What would the reader have done, were they in his position?
“Thank you, English, for writing a story that shows the meaning of love.”
--Well, I thank you for your time, and reviewing this work
Here are some notes and reflections on your review, and for myself as well when I correct it later.
“RuneScape provided an ethereal, fantasy world in which no one would ever tell me what to do.”
To me, it sounds better if it’s an ethereal fantasy world instead of an ethereal, fantasy world. The fantasy world is ethereal, so a comma doesn’t seem necessary.
--The reading voice demanded a pause after ethereal. Just to make it absolutely clear that when readers read it aloud, I want a pause there (Part of the music-making of reading, I guess you could say), I added the comma. It was a stylistic choice.
“Drinking was our passion too. It was fun, it numbed the pain and consciousness.”
08-May-2011 15:46:48
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