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Allioss

Allioss

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Oh, sorry about that*...His actual name can be Dude though!

* You may soon find out that I forget important things easily, but I remember random junk. For example, I don't remember the date I invented the revenant cow, but I know I had a donut for breakfeast that day. And bananas. Isn't that weird?? :P
EDIT: w0ot! First post on page 8! Wait...that seems like I already said that somewhere...hmmmm...

23-May-2009 13:22:30 - Last edited on 23-May-2009 13:23:34 by Allioss

Bob Giligand

Bob Giligand

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i'm willing to asume that this happened AFTER he turned into a monkey. but if no one read the bio they might get confused. perhaps you could add a little something later on when Monkey Dude/Boy explains to Cow and friends why he's a monkey.

23-May-2009 13:50:11 - Last edited on 23-May-2009 13:50:51 by Bob Giligand

Tialtair
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Tialtair

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~/+\~Rag's Story Reviews~/+\~
~/+\~Comedy~/+\~
Plot Depth: 17.
Grammar: 19.
Spelling: 19.
Support Level: You seem to have decent support for the small amount of chapters, so 40.
Comedy Level: You fell back here. 20
Total: (Out of 220) 110
Comments from the Reviewer:
This story has depth for a Comedy story, especially script based ones. So a 12 is decent. But You lacked in Comedy. There were a few good punch-lines, but they weren't abundant.
However, Your grammar and Spelling were near perfect. There were a few mistakes, but that saved you from absolute death in this. %50
My Advice:
Try to write slower, and concentrate on making things as funny as possible.
Keep up the good grammar.

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23-May-2009 14:50:17 - Last edited on 23-May-2009 14:50:35 by Tialtair

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