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Azigarath

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OK, see your posts soon Guthix and Chasers.



Annie1227 said :
Hey azi,

I fixed my last post.

Ironwolf is holding a shield and sword, so I'm not sure what you mean by Ironwolf trying to punch Annie in the chest, it'd be easier and stronger to stomp, kick, swing her sword, or step on Annie's entire body.

04-Apr-2016 19:28:31

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Inferi said :
Stop editing and move forward. Read the posts you're replying to carefully the first time, and form a response that you do not need to edit.

^ That is definitely better to do.

Annie, when making a post, note the characters' size as well as physicality and biomechanics, a twenty foot tall being would have a hard time punching a five-foot child in the chest in the first place. Imagine yourself trying to kill a squirrel while holding a machete, would you bend over and try to punch it, or just chop it with your machete or simply stomp on it? But I am sure you'll make your post better anyways. You need to picture the scenery in your head to a greater extent, don't just read the text, imagine it as real-life.



"After she attacked the Ironwolf tries to stab her in chest with her sword but she blocked the attack with her sword. Then she loop her sword trying to cut the ironwolf's arm."
I like how you mention physicality and biomechanics amidst swordsmanship, this is good. But Ironwolf is TWENTY FEET TALL, weighs over a tonne, wears a full-length mail coat over a gambeson, and Annie manages to block Ironwolf's stab? Even in real-life swordsmanship, you can break a guard and even a parry of other human opponents! I feel it is best to mention Annie dodged a stomp, kick or sideways swing.

04-Apr-2016 19:45:38 - Last edited on 04-Apr-2016 19:48:50 by Azigarath

Azigarath

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Undoubtedly, dodging would be better, more realistic, and more serious to imagine. It seems quite improbably for a five-foot child to block a thrust delivered by a twenty-foot werewolf. You must imagine everything as realistic as possible in regards to physical activity. Obviously, something immensely heavier and stronger than something else has an overwhelming advantage in inertia and mass, which will overcome a smaller, lighter thing.

04-Apr-2016 19:53:34

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