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Taleisin
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Taleisin

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I also apologise, Pink. I am very protective of my friends and I was irked at the idea that a thread I had made a comeback specifically for was being looked down on. I did not explain it as well as I should have done however - which is not something I am used to failing at, so my pride played a part as well.

Thank you for understanding, and I hope we can move forward with positivity.
Everyone has the potential to be an asshat in a flower crown.

08-Jan-2022 00:35:23

Azi Demonica

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Fysyx said :
Hi everyone! :D Hope you're doing alright

Say, Azi, do you have in mind any specified ages for Dalhover's kids? I was thinking of making a character, and wondered if it would be cool with you that they would be friends with one or more of his kids when they were growing up. Dalhover’s children would be in their thirties, their own children young. But if you’d like to be friends with them go ahead, I’d be OK with whatever ages you had.


I'm actually surprised there was some conflict and it wasn't involving me XD it's usually me saying and doing stupid things and never noticing anything until too later. Nevertheless, things ended well and I am happy for that, it shows we make efforts to reach an understanding.

08-Jan-2022 03:36:58

NotFishing

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Pink, some additional issues need to be raised:

-We're operating with late medieval technology. A physician would not be able to determine that someone is sterile. The only one who could determine that would be a life mage like Lew, and he would need to use his powers to run some sort of magical scan on himself.

-I don't understand what his 'position' as 'Chief Healer' is supposed to mean. As things currently stand he is the only person with healing magic in the entire kingdom. And he's a wanderer so I'm not sure what that position is or what responsibilities it actually entails. It sounds more like it would be a title than anything else.

-Regarding the incident with the peasant gardener, you're overestimating how much the King would actually care about his children's affairs. By that point Lew is an adult. To lecture him on why that sort of thing is wrong would be seen as unnecessary. And to dismiss the servant over that would not only be unnecessarily cruel, but also draw more attention.

-Sending him on to travel the land in the belief that it will somehow improve his health seems a bit counterproductive. I would suggest finding another reason for his departure.

-The end of your bio implies that he invented vaccines? And then somehow made enough for an entire village, and convinced them all to accept it? You need to elaborate further on that.

-You mention that he is wise, but also naive, sheltered, and easily deceived. I think wise may be the wrong word to use here, because those are not the traits of a wise man.

I should probably touch on herbalism a bit, since your character is a herbalist and so is one of his companions. Just in case you aren't aware this isn't your typical medieval fantasy RPG where the effects of magic can be replicated with potions. While herbs and flowers and whatnot can have medicinal or poisonous properties, it's nothing too far from what we might find in the real world. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

08-Jan-2022 04:40:56

Pink 4 Twink
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Your RP is confusing. Too confusing. I'm a pretty smart man, but I'm too confused by this whole "Only royals can use magic" stuff. Did you poach lore from Elder Scrolls and Rnuescape as well? Do you not have a taste for semi-originality? I have an impossible time understanding your definition of life magic, and I feel you are too strict with your requirements. This feels like nitpicking. I get you are trying to help, but it comes across as too strict. Take my character or don't. I care not either way. I am busy working on my new RP Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy! =)

08-Jan-2022 11:47:42 - Last edited on 08-Jan-2022 12:37:01 by Pink 4 Twink

Pink 4 Twink
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I am doing my best not to come off as confrontational. I feel this RP won't last long. It is too confusing. It is unoriginal. It feels improperly put together. Things needed to be explained in a thorough manner, and not in the way that was clarified to me after my first attempt at a bio. Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy! =)

08-Jan-2022 11:57:23

NotFishing

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Pink 4 Twink said :
I'm too confused by this whole "Only royals can use magic" stuff.

I don't understand what is so confusing about this. It's the main premise of the RP and the most simplistic part of it.

Pink 4 Twink said :

Did you poach lore from Elder Scrolls and Rnuescape as well?


I did not.

Pink 4 Twink said :

I have an impossible time understanding your definition of life magic


All I told you in regards to life magic is that you can't conjure up species or armies. I haven't had any other issues with your magic, and I have had no problem with the current description of life magic in your sheet. If you wanted to hammer out any specifics beyond that, I outright stated in the thread that you should have asked me about that here. You made no attempt to do so.

Pink 4 Twink said :

This feels like nitpicking.


The things I took issue with in my second round of feedback were as follows:
-Implying the existence of technology and medicine that doesn't exist in this world yet.
-Mutually-exclusive personality traits.
-Asking for clarification regarding a position your character had. A few other characters hold government positions so I wanted to make sure I understood what your position meant.
-Mischaracterizing the King, my character. He wouldn't do most of the things you said he would do. If you wanted your character's relationship with the King to have such an important role in your character's past, you should have talked to me about it and we could have worked something out.

In my opinion I don't see how any of this is nitpicking. All of these issues are worth taking seriously. I cannot accept your character in its current state. If you will not join the thread because of that, then so be it.

But there's no need to call my RP "unoriginal" or once again say it's not going to last long. That feels a bit immature. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

08-Jan-2022 14:31:06 - Last edited on 08-Jan-2022 14:49:55 by NotFishing

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