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Annie.
Sorry to burst your bubble on your character, and what she was doing, but I think you missed a small detail.
I made it clear that everyone had ran 10 miles nonstop because Vyras literally cannot stop for anything. Meaning everyone had to keep up with Zurga and everyone up front.
If Annie were walking with Brimblemir, both of them would be way too far behind to catch up because everyone was running and trying to keep up with an old man who who cannot stop. Things really are that desperate. I've alluded to this over and over, and you'll learn why very soon.
Also, Matthaeus didn't need to die. Vyras' desperation got him killed. Vyras is a very flawed character whose morals are questionable, even if his heart is in a good place. Take for example betraying those under his charge to self-mutilation. And not only did Vyras get him killed, he didn't even notice until people started cursing at him.
This whole scene showcases what people do when they are desperate. Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
Sorry to burst your bubble on your character, and what she was doing, but I think you missed a small detail.
I made it clear that everyone had ran 10 miles nonstop because Vyras literally cannot stop for anything. Meaning everyone had to keep up with Zurga and everyone up front.
If Annie were walking with Brimblemir, both of them would be way too far behind to catch up because everyone was running and trying to keep up with an old man who who cannot stop. Things really are that desperate. I've alluded to this over and over, and you'll learn why very soon.
Also, Matthaeus didn't need to die. Vyras' desperation got him killed. Vyras is a very flawed character whose morals are questionable, even if his heart is in a good place. Take for example betraying those under his charge to self-mutilation. And not only did Vyras get him killed, he didn't even notice until people started cursing at him.
This whole scene showcases what people do when they are desperate. Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
09-May-2020 01:22:16 - Last edited on 09-May-2020 01:29:48 by Pink 4 Twink
I mean it's not just that though. It feels as if you missed a good portion of what was going on. What is you character's reaction to Brimblemir losing his cool and aiming his bow and arrow at a child- just to get everyone's attention?
Does she save the child pinned to the ground because he stupidly put his katana away. (Also, I don't know why Sakura decided to give a 13 year old, very immature child a sharp and deadly katana. Like he could easily cut himself. Especially because he is smaller than a human outside the castle, and physically meek. His immune system wouldn't be that good either. All this is reversible with a good diet. But I doubt that Subaki could swing that katana very well. Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
Does she save the child pinned to the ground because he stupidly put his katana away. (Also, I don't know why Sakura decided to give a 13 year old, very immature child a sharp and deadly katana. Like he could easily cut himself. Especially because he is smaller than a human outside the castle, and physically meek. His immune system wouldn't be that good either. All this is reversible with a good diet. But I doubt that Subaki could swing that katana very well. Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
09-May-2020 01:46:09 - Last edited on 09-May-2020 01:53:08 by Pink 4 Twink
Malnourishment in children is a fascinating subject. First off, there is a reason why your parents insisted you eat your vegetables. My parents literally would not let me leave the table unless I did so. Fortunately, I liked my vegetable and even grew to like them (Except Brussels sprouts, I hated those, but grew to like them later on in life)
First thing. Lack of vitamin C compromises the immune system. There is a reason Scurvey was the bane of sailors throughout history, and it was due to them nor having enough of it. I think it might have been superstition. Sailors to this day are a very superstious people. Lack of calcium in children makes bones brittle. Iron in meats helps build muscles, I think.
There are other things I would touch on. But yeh.
Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
First thing. Lack of vitamin C compromises the immune system. There is a reason Scurvey was the bane of sailors throughout history, and it was due to them nor having enough of it. I think it might have been superstition. Sailors to this day are a very superstious people. Lack of calcium in children makes bones brittle. Iron in meats helps build muscles, I think.
There are other things I would touch on. But yeh.
Just your friendly neighborhood gay boy!
09-May-2020 02:01:37
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