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NotFishing

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I'm bored so I inputted part of Inferi's most recent Roads post into Gizoogle.

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Inferi said :

"I’ve gots tha same thang ta say dat I holla'd at his ass earlier."
tha lil' biatch replied, takin tha opportunitizzle of Harry leavin ta stand up n' retrieve her book from tha table where dat schmoooove muthafucka had placed it fo' realz. Afta a quick flip all up in tha pages, her big-ass booty shut it n' placed it back up in her bag before chillin back down all up in tha table.

"And dat is dat I was here earlier, heard some noise from up all up in tha barracks, n' then gots holla'd at by tha few remainin soldiers up here dat we should all leave just up in case before they ran up there, so peek-a-boo, clear tha way, I be comin' thru fo'sho. Oh, dis was before any suckas left fo' realz. Anyways, any suckas did, n' I didn’t. I didn’t be thinkin dat I was up in any danger, cuz it seems straight-up unlikely ta me dat a crew of bandits would either battle here up in tha straight-up original gangsta place or dat they would battle tha barracks directly. That means that, if dem comin' at weren’t bandits, they didn’t care bout anythang besides tha barracks, n' it meant I’m not up in any dark shiznit stayin up here, so peek-a-boo, clear tha way, I be comin' thru fo'sho. I was also hungry, n' I don't give a fuck bout smokin while I’m on tha road. Y'all KNOW dat shit, muthafucka! That’s not ta mention dat a funky-ass bowl of stew is next ta impossible ta carry properly, n' it would be cold by tha time I was far enough away ta smoke it ‘safely’.
Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

27-Oct-2018 01:52:07 - Last edited on 27-Oct-2018 01:56:51 by NotFishing

NotFishing

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Inferi said :

Bitch shrugged, adding, "Yo ass can call mah reasonin wack all you want yo, but since I’ve been perfectly fine down here until you all flossed up I don’t be thinkin I was wrong fo' realz. And I wouldn’t call mah dirty ass a survivor, exactly...it’s not like dis place gots attacked. Y'all KNOW dat shit, muthafucka! If you’re believin dat other muthafucka, he’s fronted ta me dat there’s a funky-ass bunch of bodies up there yo, but I haven’t been up so I can’t say whether that’s straight-up true."


"He’s right, yo ass is suspicious."
Lias holla'd on tha fuckin' down-lowly, although since her dope ass didn’t add anythang on ta dat it wasn’t clear how tha fuck much she straight-up meant dat shit.
Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

27-Oct-2018 01:52:15 - Last edited on 27-Oct-2018 01:57:39 by NotFishing

Azi Demonica

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lol, that was quite amusing to read. Black Ben isn't even that stereotypical XD

On a slightly different note, Jenna Moreci mentioned in her critique of a first chapter of mine that it's rude ''to write an accent into the dialogue by changing the spelling of the wording, as done here. I would simply mention his Irish accent in the narrative.'' which rather surprised me. This is in regards to my novel's version of Rory, who observes a girl get run over by a carriage as it races down the streets of Bristol.

27-Oct-2018 03:22:45 - Last edited on 27-Oct-2018 03:28:41 by Azi Demonica

Westenev

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Azi Demonica said :
This is in regards to my novel's version of Rory, who observes a girl get run over by a carriage as it races down the streets of Bristol.


Is anywhere safe from Truck Cart-kun's wrath?

I don't think it's bad advice - usually accents can be conveyed by changing sentence structure, grammar or wording. Spelling doesn't usually need to be changed, unless nobody can understand the character.
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27-Oct-2018 07:41:56 - Last edited on 27-Oct-2018 07:47:55 by Westenev

Azi Demonica

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Nope, no one's safe from aggressively-driven carriages. Speaking of which, I think we need a good wagon-based chase scene in a RP!

Actually, speaking form the back of the throat isn't easy to put into words. You'd have to, like, go, krrk or something, and sound like a tuning radio trying to do death metal vocals (another bad joke).
I don't know either, actually, but contrary to my radical views, I don't mean to offend people, I really don't. Despite symptoms of autism and schizophrenia, I usually try to be beneficial or improving in some way.

Oh, here are the complete quotes involved:
“Damn wagons be runnin’ people all over de place…no one cares ’bout us perr folk,” an Irishman remarks, brushing off his coat. “If I ever find dat prick, I’m ah knock ’is teeth out.”

[It’s considered offensive to write an accent into the dialogue by changing the spelling of the wording, as done here. I would simply mention his Irish accent in the narrative. ]



When I'm able to contact her again on Discord, I'll have to thank her for her advice, seeing as she did not reply to my reply of her email. I just wanna make sure she knows I am grateful for her critique, time and effort. She's truly professional.

27-Oct-2018 07:51:21

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