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Azi Demonica

Azi Demonica

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Ancient,

“But already she was catching up, and spewed venom onto a pile of swamp debris in front of him...”
So? Negotius could just have hopped over it.

“After killing about 40 between them”
Shalid and the princess killed about forty beast-Naga? And none of the monsters defended themselves?

“The massive female beast-Naga had melted pieces of wood which had been holding a large pile of debris up, causing it to fall in front of him.”
How did she melt the wood? I don't think wood can melt.

“four with Umwentelers and two with rifles.”
I take it you mean rifled musket? (so the inside of the barrel has a helical groove, causing the bullet to spin, thus increases range and accuracy; the modern rifle has it's origins in the late 1800s, which is too advanced for this thread)

“buzzing Umwentelers cutting into the scales of the snakelike creatures as they came.”
The beast-Naga do nothing to protect themselves?

About the female beast-Naga's armour:
You mention that the elephant demon threw a boulder at the beast-Naga's face, presumably the front of her helm, and this causes her armour near ground-level to crack? A boulder thrown into an armoured head would definitely knock out the target. Since the elephant demon is huge, and the boulder also quite huge, and the female beast-Naga did not notice either the demon or the thrown boulder, the impact would most certainly knock her out and break her skull.

24-Aug-2016 22:02:00

Azi Demonica

Azi Demonica

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“Negotius saw his opportunity and plunged his rapier straight into the deepest crack of the shield, which gave way and crumbled the shield into bits of wood.”
I don't recall the armoured beast-Naga wielding a shield, but I may have simply forgotten. Note that shields do not fall apart from a thrust; thrusting in the least effective way of damaging a shield. Shields in this case are made of wicker or reeds, so consist of intertwining lengths of wood, essentially basketwork in the form of a shield; it cannot simply fall apart as everything is tied together continuously throughout the weave.

“Then he lunged in and parried with the huge serpent, picking at the weak spots in her armour revealed by the boulder.”
There's no way you can parry a halberd, wielded in both hands, with a thin-bladed, especially a halberd wielded by quite a huge monster!

About creativity of the fight scene,
The fight scene you typed out is creative, such as the magic scrolls, propeller-faced shields, or when Negotius swings along the branches and the armoured monster fails to hit him. Picturing her slithering after him and swinging into branches and trees does make a good scene.

“Then he raised his staff, and the beast-Naga picked up a sharp pointed rock and plunged it in its throat.”
This is an overwhelmingly overpowered ability!

24-Aug-2016 22:02:16

Azi Demonica

Azi Demonica

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Ancient, I like how you posted three full posts, it really shows you are taking everything into consideration, however, the beast-Naga you controlled are abnormally inept. They are mentioned by me to having wicker or reed shields, and never seem to use them. They also never seem to defend or protect themselves. Basically, they are useless idiots, which destroys the lethal feel this environment was meant to have. Shalid and the princess alone were able to kill about forty of them without any problem. I also recall Shalid cutting across a chest, causing the beast-Naga to die instantly. I have read historic accounts of men sliding up the blades of swords or shafts of spears upon being impaled by them, only to cut down the opponent who did that!

Although you do not have to change anything, please take into consideration that all characters should be portrayed semi-realistically. Like humans, beast-Naga think and react, so it'd be a good idea to showcase that in the future. Try to portray enemies as you would your own characters: as living, thinking, reacting beings who want to live. Regardless, I like how you have your RPing features and factions organized so well.



note:

Rev. Caesar Caine & Pvt. Thomas Malcolm, Barracks and Battlefields in India, 1891,
“The enemy (Sikh swordsmen) received us (the 10th foot) sword in hand (at Mooltan, 1848), and fought like wild men, actually fighting with their swords when our men’s bayonets were in their bodies.”

General Orfeur Cavenagh, 1879,
“A British officer, armed with a long regulation spit (a sabre), ran his sword through a Goorkha (Ghurka). Notwithstanding his agony, the wounded man literally forced his way up to the weapon’s hilt, until he could close with his adversary, cutting him down with his kookri (a kukri) and falling dead beside him.”

24-Aug-2016 22:02:22 - Last edited on 24-Aug-2016 22:07:05 by Azi Demonica

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