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Tom the Free

Tom the Free

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To start out, this has to be one of the best stories I've ever seen written - Anywhere. If it wasn't 2 am, I would have read it all again.

25/25 - The content inside your story. I don't grade on leangth.
25/25 - How detailed your story is.
25/25 - If your story flows.
20/25 - Grammar usage

The content was 100% original, I seem to be the only one who read your first post about how your title was somewhat unfitting now.

Your story couldn't have been more detailed if you described the look on every single person's face down to the last wrinkle.

I noticed that your story flowes easily, and can probably be understood by about anyone. Most of RuneScape and the people reading this, are probably 10 years old and below, so no one can write anything too complex.

As for grammar, your word choice was awe inspiring. You did do some errors though. Check your periods, and hitting the Enter key every once in a while, like everyone said (post 3) would really help you out I think.

Overall, a solid A+

16-Jun-2007 08:13:27

Poller5
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Poller5

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Alright, thanks :D

Though I can't say I agree with "everyone being 10 or younger", many of the forumers in particular are in their teen years.

And as for the message in the first post, I edited that in later, when I felt that my old first post was obsolete and it needed a re-working.

16-Jun-2007 09:40:29

Poller5
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Poller5

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Hopefully we shall soon see how many more people think my story kicks... major posterior. I've applied to numerous places to get a review, and I'm near the top of the list for most of them, so cross your fingers.

And I may or may not be able to add today, I've got a bunch of science homework (come on, there's only 5 days left of school, is it really necessary to pile on the homework NOW?), I may have to mow the lawn this afternoon (weather dependant) and I've got a party tonight (W00T!).

Unfortunatly I won't be able to add at all tomorrow as I'm going shopping all day, and there's no way out of it :(

Unfortunatly (there really is no good news, is there?) it doesn't look like I'll have much time to add in July, as my cousins are coming from Canada for most of the month, so I'll be going around showing them England everyday. Oh well. My tentative plan to compensate for this is to write a *lot* the week after school ends, and then put it up slowly in the five minute patches of time I get on my laptop during July.

Whoa, the future does look bleak, doesn't it?

16-Jun-2007 10:56:42 - Last edited on 16-Jun-2007 16:35:12 by Poller5

Mattman875

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A black cloud hovers over this story threateningly: the end so near, and yet so far. Bloody cousins, ruining everything :@ :P .

Oh well, even if there are no adds, I'll keep bumping. Well, I'll start bumping, anyway.

16-Jun-2007 11:08:51 - Last edited on 16-Jun-2007 11:10:28 by Mattman875

Poller5
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Poller5

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The end? Near?

Not quite, my friends

But cousins will delay it :(

You'll just have to wait to learn who wins, whot the pther power is, and who eats donuts in the last chapter (Actually, I can reveal that will be King of Ardougne).

But eventually you will know.

16-Jun-2007 11:12:18

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