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The Story Of Castle Wars
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27-Jun-2007 16:46:47
I only read the proloughe and it was really good... Better than my story will ever be...
28-Jun-2007 17:52:12
Review for The Story of Castle Wars by Poller5
Spelling/Grammar- 26/30- I saw a flood of grammar mistakes, mostly commas not being put in when they're supposed to. It didn't affect the story much, but it was a bit more complicated to read to tell the truth.
Description/Vocabulary- 27/30- I saw about everything. What bothered me was that the characters weren't described well. I think that they should be described so the readers don't have to think of a character in their head. It's still great none the less. I could picture everything.
Plot/Fluent writing- 28/30- This plot is the same Saradomin versus Zamorak stuff, but for some reason, this is different. This takes place in the distant pass and seems like some sources to everything is outside RuneScape. It flowed pretty well, except for the fact that scenes were skipped, like getting to and from places. That was skipped and it's not teh best thing to do.
Character Development- 27/30- The characters were described very well, but it didn't seem like much happened with them. They all seem the same, none having different or mixed emotions. I don't know, but I just couldn't see the connection there.
Organization- 28/30- This would've gotten 30/30, but what was weird was that you put up chapters, and after chapter 5, we see chapter 8
. Also, there are two chapter 15s, each one being different. That was a bit strange. It was still great though.
Overall- 136/150- I thought this was an excellent story to read and to review. Everything that went on was excellent. I was in so much suspense, I was moving around the room, which stopped me from reading it for a few moments. I know it sounds weird, but it did happen. Oh, I also liked how you dragged on the tension before the war came. That was pretty good. When the war came, bam! It was a dead on fight to the death between Saradomin and Zamorak forces. Long story short, I loved the story and I hope this review will help your already great writing
Spelling/Grammar- 26/30- I saw a flood of grammar mistakes, mostly commas not being put in when they're supposed to. It didn't affect the story much, but it was a bit more complicated to read to tell the truth.
Description/Vocabulary- 27/30- I saw about everything. What bothered me was that the characters weren't described well. I think that they should be described so the readers don't have to think of a character in their head. It's still great none the less. I could picture everything.
Plot/Fluent writing- 28/30- This plot is the same Saradomin versus Zamorak stuff, but for some reason, this is different. This takes place in the distant pass and seems like some sources to everything is outside RuneScape. It flowed pretty well, except for the fact that scenes were skipped, like getting to and from places. That was skipped and it's not teh best thing to do.
Character Development- 27/30- The characters were described very well, but it didn't seem like much happened with them. They all seem the same, none having different or mixed emotions. I don't know, but I just couldn't see the connection there.
Organization- 28/30- This would've gotten 30/30, but what was weird was that you put up chapters, and after chapter 5, we see chapter 8
. Also, there are two chapter 15s, each one being different. That was a bit strange. It was still great though.
Overall- 136/150- I thought this was an excellent story to read and to review. Everything that went on was excellent. I was in so much suspense, I was moving around the room, which stopped me from reading it for a few moments. I know it sounds weird, but it did happen. Oh, I also liked how you dragged on the tension before the war came. That was pretty good. When the war came, bam! It was a dead on fight to the death between Saradomin and Zamorak forces. Long story short, I loved the story and I hope this review will help your already great writing
30-Jun-2007 05:18:48 - Last edited on 30-Jun-2007 05:20:40 by Venmi
yay iv finely caught up with u!!!!
now... this story is amazing!!!!!!!it is the best. i reckon could make a short book out of it. its got evry thing rite, the storyline the describing words...its just so good!!!!!!!
i rate it 110 out of 100
Gladiater359
now... this story is amazing!!!!!!!it is the best. i reckon could make a short book out of it. its got evry thing rite, the storyline the describing words...its just so good!!!!!!!
i rate it 110 out of 100
Gladiater359
30-Jun-2007 05:48:54
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