Those aren't spelling and grammar errors, in fact, if you would learn something, that is what's known as 'not lining up', and the reason my fans don't post is because IT'S NO LONGER UPDATED. You and everyone else seem to think I based my story off a video game. No, in fact, I based it off reality. The reality is that war is hell, and it so happens that war games mimic that (what a shock!) As far as the Halo thing goes, maybe you should look up the UNSC Marine Corps clan thread?
I based my story on a war that happened between the UNSC and the Covenant, you can check the war record if you don't belive me.
A short story isn't meant to last, it is meant to make an impression. A man's wife left him right after he experienced the horrors of war, and he commited suicide. How does that not have an effect? I modeled the end of that part after the suicide of my best friend, so you can gtfo if you have any issues with it. If you don't believe me, why don't you google 'suicides of Daren Reid'? I'm sure he will pop up somewhere, he died October 2007 at the age of 13.
If you think that a great leader being killed in war doesn't leave an impression, it's because you failed to think it through. A great warrior was killed; that shows that no one is untouchable and no man is bullet proof.
If you want to post something constructive fine, but don't insult my writing ability. You poked a lion in the eye and you won't get away without a reaction that you wont like.
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