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Charmeddude0

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They were so impatient, wasting the time they spent with their loved ones dancing and huffing crank.

Valkyrie took pleasure in knowing that their lives could end anytime, sometimes instantly… mostly because he would be causing it.

He took his time entering the club, taking in the lights and sounds of the Crater City night life, and ignoring the chill. It was night time, a time of day known to be generally chilly. It was only natural. Music pulsated from tower like speakers, lights and lasers danced across the ceiling creating rainbows in the air, and the room pretty much smelled like adrenaline. Valkyrie smiled as he approached the dance floor, surrounded by all the people.

They danced wildly. They were dancing targets. Targets created by a higher power for Valkyrie to kill, the kind of targets that danced. They were the kind of dancing targets that were stupid and danced in place, or stood still. Ducks.

He was home.

He danced along with the music, blending into the crowd of sweaty people. No one paid any attention to his sketchy clothing, his black long jacket, cargo pants, and combat boots, and the fact that they avoid his face during the day. In the club, Valkyrie was just another dancer, sacrificing his soul to the music. Everyone treated him as one of their own.

It did*’t take long for him to find a target. A pair of girls stood a few feet away, watching Valkryie’s chiseled frame move on the dance floor. He noticed them watching him, and smiled seductively. He winked and strutted to their location. Like school girls, the two girls blushed and erupted in a fit of girlish giggles.

“Hey,” Valkyrie said coolly, crossing his arms. Seducing a victim was an easy game that he played quite frequently. He folded his arms, accentuating his biceps and forearms, puffed out his chest, and grinned widely. The two girls did*’t respond, just smiled and stared at him dreamily.

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They’d fallen victim to his simple charms. Valkyrie scoffed, “Let me guess, you’re super models, and you’re too cool to be talking to someone like me.”

The girl on the left, a brunette with olive skin who wore a blue blouse that had just enough cleavage for a normal outing, giggled and blushed, turning away in embarrassment. The girl on the right, a blond girl with tanned skin who wore short jean shorts and a blue tanks top, answered, “We-we’re not super models… but you-you-you’re sweet.”

“You’re kidding!” said Valkyrie, shocked. He arched his eyebrows, and said, “I find that hard to believe… you two are clearly the hottest girls here.” The two girls’ faces couldn’t get any redder. They were easier to charm than most girls, and Valkyrie appreciated that. After the walk in the park – or forest – that was Jennifer Stone, another two easy kills would make his night. “You girls got names?”

“Ashley!” the brunette blurted, bursting out in laughter immediately afterwards. “I’m sorry, we’re new here. You’re the first guy we’ve met so far, and you’re kind of smoking hot. So we can only imagine what other guys here look like. I mean, back in Goner Town, the guys were boring. And now here you are interested in us—”

The blond girl put her mouth over Ashley’s mouth, sighing. “Ashley, shut up. You’re rambling. I’m Julia, by the way,” she interrupted, removing her hand from Ashley’s face, revealing her ever present smile.

“Ashley and Julia… beautiful names for beautiful girls,” he flirted. He lowered his arms and coolly bobbed up and down, dancing. “You girls dance?” Ashley and Julia looked at each other, nodding instantly. Valkyrie took their hands and they began to dance. This kill would probably be easier than he thought.

The three of them danced, rubbing their bodies together, Valkyrie in the middle with complete control over what was happening. But something was wrong. He couldn’t fight the feeling that someone was watching him.

21-Aug-2010 22:27:45

Charmeddude0

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Voyeurism wasn’t a new in a club as sleazy as this. Middle aged men from all over Crater City came here to watch attractive youngsters practically make love on the dance floor. But this stare felt hostile, like the stare of a hunter.

Valkyrie looked around the club, searching for his stalker, undistracted by Ashley and Julia. Whoever was watching him felt close, so close he could almost feel their breathing. But there was no one around him, just Ashley and Julia, who were enjoying themselves using Valkyrie as some kind of stripper’s pole. He hadn’t noticed.

Maybe they’re invisible? Valkyrie thought, It’s the Magic Age… wouldn’t be unbelievable. He looked up to the stairways, and then the bars, but there was no one. The balconies were the last place for Valkyrie to search, and there she was. Standing directly above Valkyrie and his dancing partners stood a lady.

She had pale skin, a petit figure, and wore a black lacey dress, and a veil that covered her face except her mouth down. It was the Spirit of the Forest, and she stood staring directly at Valkyrie. He shrugged it off and turned his attention back to the girls. The Spirit cursed his ignorance, feeling provoked. She smirked, stepped upon the ledge of the balcony, and jumped into the crowd. Either nobody could see her, or they just did*’t notice.

Valkyrie invested himself in the girls’ promiscuity, and then the chill returned. He was paralyzed. It felt as if someone was playing with his mind, inserting fear into his emotions. Whatever was happening, and whoever was doing it, had failed because he did*’t feel afraid or fear, just uncomfortable. And his face showed it.

Julia noticed his change of expression, and got off her knees. “Baby, what’s wrong?”

She was a stupid girl, a target, so Valkyrie ignored her. With more important things to do, she became obsolete. Things were becoming dire; the feeling of unease began to grow into fear, an emotion that was foreign to Valkyrie.

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He pushed Julia and Ashley aside, much to their despair and anger. Frantically, Valkyrie searched the crowd for the veiled lady; she must’ve had something to do with this. He had to find her.

He blinked and there she was. The Spirit’s pale green eyes glowed with knowledge, a glow that broke through her veil. She smirked menacingly. Nobody else could see her, and she was soon about to take control of the situation. “No need to be afraid,” she murmured, her voice overpowering the music. “I’m not here to hurt you.”

“Like hell you’re not!* Valkyrie shouted. Nobody noticed his outbreak except for Ashley and Julia. He ripped out his steel dagger from his long jacket and slashed Ashley’s throat and stabbed Julia in the heart. He threw the bodies into the crowd, creating uproar as blood gushed onto the floor and into the air. Screams erupted from the crowd, equal to the music pumping.

The Spirit looked unfazed. “Cute,* she muttered. She advanced towards Valkyrie, who found his fear and unease was replaced by calm. “Now, be calm, I’m not here to cause you harm.” She seemed to move through the rampaging club goers.

*What are you?” Valkyrie asked in a casual tone, as if he was engaging in everyday conversation with this spirit.

“They call me the Spirit of the Forest. Now, be still,” she answered and touched Valkyrie’s temples. A light shone from her finger tips, and entered Valkyrie’s body. Before he could respond, his eyes rolled back and he fainted under his touch.

Pleased with her work, the Spirit knelt down next to Valkyrie’s unconscious body, and whispered into his ears, “Remember this, Mr. Valkyrie… You live lavishly, killing whoever you desire. You kill without regret or remorse. But, in this world, death is a virtue…”

With that, she was gone.

x... End of CHAPTER 2 ...x

21-Aug-2010 22:28:27 - Last edited on 04-Sep-2010 03:47:11 by Charmeddude0

Looksavebee

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unease and despair
~ I feel like "an uneasy despair" would work better here... dunno, though.

Blood trickled from her twisted body, creating little veins that ran throughout the forest
~ Nice visual, that!

It was then; the Spirit of the Forest was summoned.
~ I'm pretty sure you've used the semi colon wrongly, here. "That" would replace it.

She sighed a sigh filled with pleasure
~ Redundant. New word for 'sighed' perhaps? Moaned?

previously?!” she screamed
~ Tsk =P

avenge you.” She turned to face the crowd. “And I
~ Tsk again =P

Sweaty Bullets
~ I laughed.

buddy!” they
~ Three's a crowd!

Like school girls, the two girls blushed and erupted in a fit of girlish giggles.
~ Oh, how I hate the girlish giggle. Though I'm guilty of doing the same D=

Remember this, Mr. Valkyrie… You live lavishly
~ I'm pretty sure after an ellipse, you don't capitalise unless it's a proper noun.

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Well, well, well. Interesting chapter indeed! You're setting it up nicely and giving Valkyrie a nice development. I can see him being a very complicated character!

Continue, my friend! I shall be watching/reading!

23-Aug-2010 07:27:04

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