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Charmeddude0

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And then the pressure of the lights was gone. Jack cautiously opened his eyes. The hole was closed, the shovel was jammed into the dirt mound, the bloody scene was ever present, and there was a petite woman in a black dress and a veil standing before him. He was on his eyes, stuck in the position, bent to her will, perhaps? Her pale face was expressionless, but her pale green eyes spoke volumes of her anger and rage.

His body was paralyzed, but Jack found he could still speak. “Who are you?” he asked the most basic of questions. He wanted answers, and, in this situation, he wanted them now.

The petit woman, Jack assumed she was the Burning Blair ghost, said nothing. She glided up to Jack and growled, “You are not him… You are an intruder still. You come in, treat my home as a play ground, and you have blood on your hands**

*What’re you..?” Jack looked down at his hands, they were soaked in blood. A pool of blood circled his knees. He did*’t understand how he did*’t notice this earlier. But this blood wasn’t his, then who’s…?

“You are not him,” she repeated. “But you are still a bad man, and you deserve to die… Jennifer Stone died so I could avenge her. And if that means killing other bad men in the process…”

It was obvious then, this woman was the ghost of the forest. Jack thought, maybe, he could work out some kind of deal with her. “Ma’am, please, wait,” pleaded Jack. He needed to stall her as much as he possibly could. “I believe we share a common enemy; a common cause, even,” The Spirit stopped. “I’m trying to avenge the death of Jennifer Stone.”

The Spirit stood still. For a few moments she prodded through Jack’s mind, looking for reason to not believe him. But there was none. She was displeased with his validity. “You are telling the truth, but I won’t help you. Who sent you?”

“The Royal One.”

09-Sep-2010 02:11:27

Charmeddude0

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The Spirit was silent. “You are an intruder, you will be punished,” She finished her journey to Jack, and reached for his hands. She took his bloody hands in her own, and squeezed. “Feel the pain, suffering, and rage of those who have fallen by your blade… feel my rage, the one whose grave you violated,” she spoke, spite and anger in her voice.

The blood on Jack’s hands sunk into his skin, coursing through his veins. A rush of adrenaline brought on by anger and rage came over him. He suddenly felt the urge to hit something, anything. He glared at the Spirit, her paralytic state over him fueling his rage. Her lips spread into a grin, “His name is that of angels… but he is no such thing…” she muttered. “You’ll know who he is when you see him.”

“Let me go,” Jack demanded.

“Go, destroy him,” The Spirit commanded before she disappeared into the night sky.

x... End of CHAPTER 7 ...x

09-Sep-2010 02:13:21

Looksavebee

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Just on the topic of what a Valkyrie is:

Valkyries were originally from Norse Mythology. That were seen akin to that of Angels of Death, deciding who died in battle and went to Valhalla, the Norse's version of heaven, where they prepared for Ragnarök. They were also females =D

And two new chapters/additions for me to read this evening after my second chemistry test! I await that time with baited breath!

09-Sep-2010 02:37:44 - Last edited on 09-Sep-2010 02:38:11 by Looksavebee

Charmeddude0

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Dude, absolutely no rush, at all. Do what you gotta do :) .

Valkyries have the same mythology in Russian mythos as well, I believe. I just thought it'd be fitting for a serial killer, hah.

So, it's annoying. I have ideas for how to progress the Royal One/Jack story lines, and stuff for Valkyrie later on. But I wanna do a Valkyrie chapter now.

I feel like I'm not giving our main dude enough spot light, what you guys think?

09-Sep-2010 02:48:40 - Last edited on 09-Sep-2010 02:52:02 by Charmeddude0

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CHAPTER 8:

The bar was like any other; a small, smoky building that smelled like alcohol too old to be consumed by anything still with a pulse. Loud, obnoxious banter took place within its walls, and so did the occasional fight. But, today, all was calm. Orders were requested, drinks were dispensed, and pointless stories were shared. It was almost like a step out of reality. Nobody paid any attention to Jennifer Stone’s murder; it was as if it never happened.

From the shadowy corners of the bar, Valkyrie watched the drunks and criminals of Crater City congregate. He sat in the corner with a bottle of beer, a piece of cloth, and a match. Nobody paid any attention to him; it was almost as if he wasn’t even there at all. Valkyrie just assumed he blended in with the shadows. So, nobody noticed as he opened the beer bottle, tossing the cap into the crowd, and stuffed the cloth into the mouth of the bottle. And then something caught his attention, distracting him from his plan.

Just as he struck up a match, a loud, angry man with flowing blond hair, and a weathered, beige overcoat burst into the bar, grabbing everyone’s attention. He huffed angrily as he scoped out the crowd. Nobody could take their eyes off the blood stains and dirt on his coat. He was silent, and so was the bar. The tension was electric, and Valkyrie couldn’t feel more comfortable.

“Who did it?” the angry man growled, his eyes staring daggers at every suspicious looking man in the bar. “Who did it!?” he repeated.

The bartender left his post and approached the angry man. The bartender gripped his shoulder firmly and whispered in his ear, “Jack, what are you doing here? I thought you said…”

“There’s no time for ‘discreet,’ Jolee,” Jack snapped back. “This man is killing people, more people than just Jennifer Stone. There was a riot earlier today, and you know how it started? A body was found. Some people say it rained blood,” Jack explained angrily.

11-Sep-2010 04:59:38

Charmeddude0

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Valkyrie grinned as he listened. “It was the body of that guy I knew, at that restaurant. He was killed earlier today, by the same guy who killed Jennifer Stone, no doubt. If I don’t find this guy, then more people are going to die!”

Jolee sighed and grabbed Jack’s other shoulder and stared him straight him in the eyes. “Jack, you’re not going to find out who did it like this, storming into places demanding answers. I heard about your little escapades earlier. You smashed a few heads ‘cause they wouldn’t answer your questions, am I wrong?”

This Jack character did*’t hesitate. “Do you know how many people are dying because of this man?”

“And you added two more names to the weekly obituaries.”

“I did*’t kill them,” Jack spat. “They’re just unconscious.*

*That’s not the point, Jack, you need to leave. Do some more research, have you done any investigating?”

Jack was silent once more, reminded of the Burning Blair Forest, and of his encounter with the Spirit. Something in the back of his head told him not to tell Jolee about that encounter, almost like the voice back at the forest. He thought he’d escaped the supernatural influence, but he was too furious to argue with ghosts. At that moment, he realized he would never escape the Spirit’s influence.

“What’s the problem, Jolee? Why you want to get rid of me so fast? You hiding something?” Jack said sarcastically. “Would you like to tell me you killed Jennifer Stone? And all those other people?”

“Jack, just leave. You’re obviously drunk, or something. Just go,” Jolee demanded in a calm, almost serene voice. “Clear your head. Get some sleep.”

Jack shrugged off Jolee’s grip and headed towards the door. “I swear, Jolee, if I find out you have something to do with this. I’ll find you, and kill you myself.”

11-Sep-2010 05:00:47

Charmeddude0

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The bar crowd did*’t take well to this threat, and neither did Jolee. But it seemed unnecessary to take action now, as Jack was just leaving. Everyone was too flustered to notice Valkyrie light his match. He lit the cloth on fire, and rolled the bottle somewhere in the middle of the crowd. Nobody paid any attention as Valkyrie got up and left the bar.

It was as if he wasn’t even there.

Without any hassle, he left the bar, the crowd still completely oblivious to the bomb right under their noses. Valkyrie almost couldn’t believe they’d be so stupid, until somebody yelled, “Hey, does anybody smell smoke?!” But by that point it was too late. The Molotov cocktail went off, and the bar went up in flames as Valkyrie walked away untouched.

Like chickens with their heads cut off, men and women hurried to put out the fire. After some time, they succeeded, but the drunks and criminals inside couldn’t be saved. The smell of burning flesh was carried into the air along with the smoke, and nothing could’ve made Valkyrie happier.

Suddenly, his memory returned to that of the angry man, Jack. He was searching for Valkyrie, and, he seemed to know more than he was letting on. And, by the sounds of it, he was hired, probably by the Royal One himself.

Valkyrie stopped himself from making any more assumptions. He walked the streets of Crater City, searching for the angry man. To Valkyrie it felt like nothing had changed. He killed some people, caused an uproar, killed more people, started an inferno, and now he was ready to start again. And, now, he’d found his next target.

x... End of CHAPTER 8 ...x

11-Sep-2010 05:01:23

[#SKZPQMZTB]

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“This is nonsense!” Jack screamed at the top of his lungs.

Nonsense? THIS. IS. CRATER CITY!!!!


On a serious note, great story! Can't wait for more. Also, I have a theory that Jack is Valkyrie from the future that went back in time. Or... something. *cough*


EDIT: ZOMG! 100th post!

12-Sep-2010 05:01:47 - Last edited on 12-Sep-2010 05:03:08 by [#SKZPQMZTB]

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