"She softly stroked my cheek, wiping away the angry tears. Her touch made everything better."
Would be
"She softly stroked my cheek, turning off my prayer and knocking me back. Her touch made my brews seem like shrimp."
You can only fully appreciate a story when you experience it through the eyes of one of its characters.
I meant to post when you first wrote it, but didn't get around to it
So, I stumbled across it again and wanted to make a point of telling you that I thought it was beautifully written and you should keep it up, maybe expand upon it
I really enjoyed reading it and hope you'll write more.
Talia Mi - <Insert Something Witty Here>