Thanks for taking the time to reread my recreation Xen. Like Zmaster, I don’t get criticism much either. I’ll be sure to think about what I can improve on, too. Hopefully I’ll get better when the next assignment comes along.
Oh, and I forgot to add feedback about the other two guys, I should do that, too. As Xen mentioned, Zmaster made many improvements from his last bio, which is always a nice thing to see. In the past, I have given others heavy criticism, and then as they continued their stories, they got so much better that I felt proud of them (almost). I wonder how Ender got the eyeglasses though. The “derobing” was absolutely awesome, though, that is a mini masterpiece. I don’t think fictional Arabic peoples would have anything besides black hair and brown eyes, however, Turks sometimes have blonde hair and blue eyes even today.
Yam made a good bio, and I could not help but wonder what if Yam’s and Zmaster’s characters somehow were thrown into one story, that’d be interesting for sure. I found it a bit odd that Yalthus would be a fictional Spaniard, seeing as he comes from the desert, a people based off Muslims, but then again southern Spain used to be under Moorish control, so I suppose it makes sense anyways. "Jump through the pillars, horsey!"
Oh, and well done to everyone so far, and thanks to Xen for taking the time for setting up his thread.
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