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But uh, I'm straying away from the topic. I'mma just say, if you're find a non-human race's appearance appealing in that matter -- you shouldn't live on this planet anymore. Yes, all of those cultural references were necessary. I do have a problem with such portrayals of women, given that I am one. But it's like kitchen jokes, you hear/see them so much that you just get used to 'em.
Now that I'm thinking of horrible portrayals of women and Sci-fi, I'm thinking of the movie called Oblivion with Tom Cruise. What a horror that was... Only thing to save it was Morgan Freeman. 'Cause Morgan Freeman is awesome. But anyway, back on topic!
"*Sendor punches a hole into the Albali's chest, then rips out the soldier's heart.”
If he can do that, thrust his fingers through the ribcage and such, why bother having a sword? He could just grab blades, pull them aside and rip people apart like Grendel (who in myth could rip people apart)."
You're right -- with such power, why would you use a sword? xD MAYBE he likes poking people with sharp objects!
"Wigwam/Seph’s bio’s last name, Bowditch, I read incorrectly
The combat intents of the bios are a bit off."
Give him a break. xD It was a very old bio! Trust me, nowadays he can write one like nobody's business.
As for the others, well... I liked them all. They all had their quirks, both strengths and weaknesses. All of which I didn't fully exploit. But nevertheless, they're all quite old. So, just like the terror that is the stories you have been reading of mine -- you'll just have to forgive it.
"“The innocent blood is washed away by the falling rain.”
Blood is thicker than water, so it’d just make bloody water."
That line was more of a symbolic thing, I think. I know blood's thicker than water.
Now that I'm thinking of horrible portrayals of women and Sci-fi, I'm thinking of the movie called Oblivion with Tom Cruise. What a horror that was... Only thing to save it was Morgan Freeman. 'Cause Morgan Freeman is awesome. But anyway, back on topic!
"*Sendor punches a hole into the Albali's chest, then rips out the soldier's heart.”
If he can do that, thrust his fingers through the ribcage and such, why bother having a sword? He could just grab blades, pull them aside and rip people apart like Grendel (who in myth could rip people apart)."
You're right -- with such power, why would you use a sword? xD MAYBE he likes poking people with sharp objects!
"Wigwam/Seph’s bio’s last name, Bowditch, I read incorrectly
The combat intents of the bios are a bit off."
Give him a break. xD It was a very old bio! Trust me, nowadays he can write one like nobody's business.
As for the others, well... I liked them all. They all had their quirks, both strengths and weaknesses. All of which I didn't fully exploit. But nevertheless, they're all quite old. So, just like the terror that is the stories you have been reading of mine -- you'll just have to forgive it.
"“The innocent blood is washed away by the falling rain.”
Blood is thicker than water, so it’d just make bloody water."
That line was more of a symbolic thing, I think. I know blood's thicker than water.
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14-Aug-2013 15:22:11
"Joshua says, “And you took the job as an Assassin Hunter?” in regards to Sarah not wanting to harm people despite being an Assassin Hunter. This line stands out to some extent, I suppose it should put at least one thing I liked within dialogue. So far, I find Nyx to be my preferred character. Gotta be positive once in a while, but I would tell her to grow up."
Wow, I actually did some dialogue correctly? Heh, never thought I'd see the day. And I liked writing Nyx.
I don't know why, but the crazy, sadistic characters have always been my favorite kind. They're so unusual and unpredictable. And most of the time, watching one is a unique experience. I don't think I've seen such a character act in a similar way as others of its kind.
"A blue werewolf? What is this blasphemy. Well, during those sixteen seconds, couldn’t Joshua take advantage?"
It's different, give it a break! And well, you're right. But if I recall a lot of other shows/movies I've watched with similar situations, attacking almost never works.
"“He charged at Joshua and slashed his deadly right claw at him.”
In this regard, the werewolf’s arms could be lopped off with upward slashes."
Guess it never crossed my mind. o_o
"Well, I suppose Joshua could have grabbed a handful of sand and throw it into the werewolf’s face. Not that he’d do it, but hey, if werewolves were real, I’d consider it."
Another thing I guess never crossed my mind. Hmm, environmental attacks... hmm...
"This Earth Bending did not cross my mind. I don’t even know what it is."
It's from a show called Avatar: The Last Airbender.
"*She noticed that the right arm of this man did not seem to be there, like it was gone.”
Not sure what this is trying to say :/"
You know it's bad when I (because I'm the writer of the sentence) can't even tell what it's saying. xD
Wow, I actually did some dialogue correctly? Heh, never thought I'd see the day. And I liked writing Nyx.
I don't know why, but the crazy, sadistic characters have always been my favorite kind. They're so unusual and unpredictable. And most of the time, watching one is a unique experience. I don't think I've seen such a character act in a similar way as others of its kind.
"A blue werewolf? What is this blasphemy. Well, during those sixteen seconds, couldn’t Joshua take advantage?"
It's different, give it a break! And well, you're right. But if I recall a lot of other shows/movies I've watched with similar situations, attacking almost never works.
"“He charged at Joshua and slashed his deadly right claw at him.”
In this regard, the werewolf’s arms could be lopped off with upward slashes."
Guess it never crossed my mind. o_o
"Well, I suppose Joshua could have grabbed a handful of sand and throw it into the werewolf’s face. Not that he’d do it, but hey, if werewolves were real, I’d consider it."
Another thing I guess never crossed my mind. Hmm, environmental attacks... hmm...
"This Earth Bending did not cross my mind. I don’t even know what it is."
It's from a show called Avatar: The Last Airbender.
"*She noticed that the right arm of this man did not seem to be there, like it was gone.”
Not sure what this is trying to say :/"
You know it's bad when I (because I'm the writer of the sentence) can't even tell what it's saying. xD
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14-Aug-2013 15:28:06 - Last edited on 14-Aug-2013 15:55:00 by Serene End
"Well, I’m pretty sure my first two reviews were tougher than Areno’s. Hey, you even got a Jmod to post!"
Nah, I don't think so. His first words were that I "still had much to learn" in regards to writing. I was going through a rough patch of life there so I took it with great offence. While I easily just could've acknowledged that on my own, he had to let it be known that that's how he felt. Then it got me more mad that Elite apparently came in... which either he conveniently clicked the thread just as Areno was posting, saw his name and was curious, or he had been told of it.
Either way, it bothered me when he apologized. o_o Heck, it still does when I think about. I was never properly taught grammar, spelling, punctuation in any regard. I have the education level of a second-grader just about. Maybe a little fifth and eighth grade here and there. But that was the last year I completed.
But I think there's a difference between your criticisms and his. He was bashing while you were criticizing. Big difference, as far as I'm concerned. It's either that or I just grew up a little.
Man, I still wish I could've seen what was said through the rest of the argument. xD Just to satisfy curiosity, mostly. Dat JMod post.
But uh, anyway... back on topic!
"“When Marcello's fist made contact with Abaddon's elbow, it bent unnaturally. It bent like a bow, and all you hear were cracks of broken bones.*
That’s a good one, stands out, I never read anything like that before."
No? o_o Well uh, that's always good I guess!
"“”You just apologize for everything, don't you? Even if it isn't your fault.””
Ha, I recall a student in college/university who was like that, overly apologetic, even when nothing wrong was done."
Around the time I was writing this, I was quite like that myself. But I think I grew up a little. I'm not apologizing five times for one thing that I didn't do.
Nah, I don't think so. His first words were that I "still had much to learn" in regards to writing. I was going through a rough patch of life there so I took it with great offence. While I easily just could've acknowledged that on my own, he had to let it be known that that's how he felt. Then it got me more mad that Elite apparently came in... which either he conveniently clicked the thread just as Areno was posting, saw his name and was curious, or he had been told of it.
Either way, it bothered me when he apologized. o_o Heck, it still does when I think about. I was never properly taught grammar, spelling, punctuation in any regard. I have the education level of a second-grader just about. Maybe a little fifth and eighth grade here and there. But that was the last year I completed.
But I think there's a difference between your criticisms and his. He was bashing while you were criticizing. Big difference, as far as I'm concerned. It's either that or I just grew up a little.
Man, I still wish I could've seen what was said through the rest of the argument. xD Just to satisfy curiosity, mostly. Dat JMod post.
But uh, anyway... back on topic!
"“When Marcello's fist made contact with Abaddon's elbow, it bent unnaturally. It bent like a bow, and all you hear were cracks of broken bones.*
That’s a good one, stands out, I never read anything like that before."
No? o_o Well uh, that's always good I guess!
"“”You just apologize for everything, don't you? Even if it isn't your fault.””
Ha, I recall a student in college/university who was like that, overly apologetic, even when nothing wrong was done."
Around the time I was writing this, I was quite like that myself. But I think I grew up a little. I'm not apologizing five times for one thing that I didn't do.
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14-Aug-2013 16:43:24
"Somewhat a convenience for that pipe to be there, especially with the vampire directly beneath it. Oh well, a vampire being killed by a pipe down the head is something new to me at least."
In RuneScape lore, vampyres can be killed only by silver weapons. Now in even more convenience, that pipe just so happens to be made of silver. Reminds me a lot of the end of the Slug questline... so anticlimactic.
"Marcello reappears and stabs Abaddon, who probably should have not spent ten seconds staring."
Too busy trying to look cool.
"What’s RTS?"
Rays that Shine. Thinking about it... it should be RS since 'that' isn't capitaliz—whatever!
Uh, yes -- the combat and dialogue is quite silly I know. Awmg, four AM.
Don't you ever sleep? But yes, I did indeed enjoy much of this fanbase I once had. Though looking back now is a sort of bittersweet experience. But regardless, I have every intention of taking up that advice you've offered. I will attempt to try to work on the characters, make them more emotional and work on their dialogue. Do less describing in terms of things the reader themselves can just easily assume (a good friend of mine offered the same advice so I have to imagine that it is indeed a problem of mine.) And yes, especially work on the combat. I'll attempt to make it more realistic, faster-paced, and a little less inactive. Though people will still get tossed around like nobody's business. xD
Huh, I've spent quite a bit of time replying back to you. A good chuck of the morning, and it's now digging into the afternoon. It's twelve PM, so I suppose I should head off for now. I'm sure you've got plenty to write on so you can be kept busy a little while longer. But anyway, I truly do appreciate each word you've given to me. Thank you so very much. By the way, at the end of your post -- I see what you did thar.
…,.»·•º°°º•·«.,…,.•*´¨¨†hë ènd îš ønlÿ †hè ßègïnnïng,…,„.«•*¨`*•.,..
In RuneScape lore, vampyres can be killed only by silver weapons. Now in even more convenience, that pipe just so happens to be made of silver. Reminds me a lot of the end of the Slug questline... so anticlimactic.
"Marcello reappears and stabs Abaddon, who probably should have not spent ten seconds staring."
Too busy trying to look cool.
"What’s RTS?"
Rays that Shine. Thinking about it... it should be RS since 'that' isn't capitaliz—whatever!
Uh, yes -- the combat and dialogue is quite silly I know. Awmg, four AM.
Don't you ever sleep? But yes, I did indeed enjoy much of this fanbase I once had. Though looking back now is a sort of bittersweet experience. But regardless, I have every intention of taking up that advice you've offered. I will attempt to try to work on the characters, make them more emotional and work on their dialogue. Do less describing in terms of things the reader themselves can just easily assume (a good friend of mine offered the same advice so I have to imagine that it is indeed a problem of mine.) And yes, especially work on the combat. I'll attempt to make it more realistic, faster-paced, and a little less inactive. Though people will still get tossed around like nobody's business. xD
Huh, I've spent quite a bit of time replying back to you. A good chuck of the morning, and it's now digging into the afternoon. It's twelve PM, so I suppose I should head off for now. I'm sure you've got plenty to write on so you can be kept busy a little while longer. But anyway, I truly do appreciate each word you've given to me. Thank you so very much. By the way, at the end of your post -- I see what you did thar.
…,.»·•º°°º•·«.,…,.•*´¨¨†hë ènd îš ønlÿ †hè ßègïnnïng,…,„.«•*¨`*•.,..
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14-Aug-2013 16:48:45 - Last edited on 14-Aug-2013 17:29:33 by Serene End
"Always liked the game, and as you’d expect, I can point out the flaws in it but it’s an old game, there probably never will be a game engine that can make combat realistic in terms of weapons, hands, tripping, wrestling, etc.."
Eh, I'm sure there'll come a day where a guy who wants more realism in stuff to join the video game industry.
It's bound to happen!
But yeah, Fable 1 is and shall forever be the best of the series. I'm always evil as I can never do the nice things. xD Jack of Blades was the most interesting of the characters, though in the later games I've grown interested in Theresa's character. Even to the point that she solely was the only thing I actually was intrigued by in both Fable 2 and 3. Lucien (main antagonist of Fable 2) was a bit of a newb and reminded me a lot of the way Cesare Borgia was portrayed in Assassin's Creed: Brotherhood. He hid behind guards, or just otherwise had others do his dirty work all the time. The antagonist of Fable 3... was quite uninteresting.
Though *spoiler alert* I'm going to be disappointed if they killed Theresa off in Fable: The Journey. *end spoilers* I just sincerely couldn't forgive the fact that they took away so much that made the original Fable so fun. The combat was made easier, and there is really no penalty in dying. 'Cept getting scars on your character and so on. The customization is more limited in comparison to Fable 2, I found myself wearing the same outfit everytime I played through Fable 3 because I liked no other attire except for the Elegant Prince/Princess outfit. Play Fable 3 when you can. It's not a terrible game, just compared to the others it is.
Eh, I'm sure there'll come a day where a guy who wants more realism in stuff to join the video game industry.
It's bound to happen!
But yeah, Fable 1 is and shall forever be the best of the series. I'm always evil as I can never do the nice things. xD Jack of Blades was the most interesting of the characters, though in the later games I've grown interested in Theresa's character. Even to the point that she solely was the only thing I actually was intrigued by in both Fable 2 and 3. Lucien (main antagonist of Fable 2) was a bit of a newb and reminded me a lot of the way Cesare Borgia was portrayed in Assassin's Creed: Brotherhood. He hid behind guards, or just otherwise had others do his dirty work all the time. The antagonist of Fable 3... was quite uninteresting.
Though *spoiler alert* I'm going to be disappointed if they killed Theresa off in Fable: The Journey. *end spoilers* I just sincerely couldn't forgive the fact that they took away so much that made the original Fable so fun. The combat was made easier, and there is really no penalty in dying. 'Cept getting scars on your character and so on. The customization is more limited in comparison to Fable 2, I found myself wearing the same outfit everytime I played through Fable 3 because I liked no other attire except for the Elegant Prince/Princess outfit. Play Fable 3 when you can. It's not a terrible game, just compared to the others it is.
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15-Aug-2013 15:38:38
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