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Yrolg

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Substance
Upon the boughs of my soul’s tree
There kindly sits a memory
Inclined to state forevermore
The pain through which I’ve gone before.
It taunts with letters on its face
As long as time and wide as space
That spell a scene of hurt and pain
And sing a song of my love’s bane:
“A rose there sat on here, one day,
But ‘twas not long fore‘t wither’d way
And in that red-hued flower’s stead
There lay a love: forgotten, dead.
Upon its stem a wreath of black
Betrayed what memories do lack."

17-Feb-2010 01:11:35 - Last edited on 17-Feb-2010 01:17:29 by Yrolg

Yrolg

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Autumn
If perchance your eye strays,
And of our leaves you note,
That on the golden sun’s rays,
There rides in as a boat,
A caravan of promised goods
Brought forth to these forgotten woods,
You’ll see a scene of orange and red,
No strokes of brown and green,
And plants that hope to soon be dead,
Within this forlorn scene.
For though the chill of winter’s stare
Makes breezes blow in cold,
Though sunlight ventures here so rare,
And never now as bold,
Though the skies have ceased their crying,
And though we all shall soon be dead,
Though these woods of ours are dying,
We boldly wear our suits of red.

17-Feb-2010 01:16:56 - Last edited on 17-Feb-2010 01:18:39 by Yrolg

Yrolg

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RichGodFrodo,
Hello. I don't know what source says that omnibus is dative, but the source is incorrect. I'm not sure you understand fully the meaning of an indirect object or the dative category of words. Omnibus is a member of the classification of nouns which may be member of a series of other categories of nouns with dependence upon the context in which the word is used.
In the phrase, "Yrolg's Omnibus", there is no verb, therefore, the word cannot be dative. Ablation also requires basic sentence structure (usually in the form of a verb) in order to apply. Further, "omnium" doesn't have a definition which would apply here. An omnibus is an anthology of similar works created by a single author whereas an "omnium" (in the closest definition to what I think you mean) is the aggregate value of different stocks in loans (usually applied to the government). Furthermore, "omnes" is a pure Latin word (to an extent O_o ) and would therefore be changing the language of my title -- something I'm not interested in. Even further still, however, the meaning of the word "omnes" is not at all what omnibus is currently stating.
As to the topic of genitivity, I don't know why it applies. As you said, the only word expressing possession in my title is "Yrolg's", and, being a possessive noun itself, it cannot affect the dative/ablative case of the word "omnibus". I'll be frank in saying I'm not an expert on Latin, but I needn't be -- the words I'm using are the English variations (if indeed you thought they were the latin ones).
If you're referring to another usage, please do tell me. :)
Thanks for your comments!

17-Apr-2010 00:31:50 - Last edited on 17-Apr-2010 00:38:22 by Yrolg

Crocefisso

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Bookmark. This is a very interesting thread indeed, and I wholly endorse the idea. If only there were more threads in this vein then this forum would be a better place.
I think that the poem "Substance", however, lacked substance, I would reccomend not writing in the AABB rhyme pattern, though this is also a personal opinion, I believe it does not flow too well. If read out loud I believe the poem sounds rather forced.

18-Apr-2010 22:20:07 - Last edited on 18-Apr-2010 22:21:48 by Crocefisso

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