Wintry Elf: Wow, talk about impact. The style of writing is very creative, and I really liked the addition of the three paragraph introduction. Construction is worked in subtly, but I like the way you carve a possible “inside story” (if you’ll excuse the pun) into the skill. Looking at the themes, I found your story very confronting, but this is probably a good thing in regards to what you wanted. The breaking of the silver jewellery is absolutely perfect, and is what I want to mention at the forefront of everything. The way you introduce it as a symbolic object in the introduction, and then cause it to break, is fantastic symbolism, and works very well with impact in your story. It ties everything you address together.
Nyyrikki V: A very, very ambitious and intricate plot. If this round was judged solely on your plot, you would win easily. However, I have to factor in the other elements as well. The action within your story is quite strong, but the character limit robs you of much descriptive opportunity. I don’t think this really impacts you too much, though, as I was captivated through the entire entry. I was constantly unsure of how it would end, and this was a great aspect of your story. You should develop this idea into a larger story.
Paccy IV: I am laughing. The interpretation of this story is spot on; herblore is used in a very creative manner. While the entry may not be as well written as some of the others in this round, it is for sure one of the most creative. It is this type of writing that will set you above than rest. I don’t have much else to say about it, but well done on putting yourself apart from the competition.
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Borna Coric
