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Yrolg

Yrolg

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"If we had no grammar, nothing would be understandable; it'd just be a huge mess."
Hello. I personally prefer to provide a stop before the final clause. It helps to add emphasis to the fact that nothing would work.
"If we had no grammar, nothing would be understandable. Everything would just be a huge mess."
I suppose that if you're trying to achieve colloquialism through this sentence, a semicolon is perfectly appropriate. I'm not a person renown for my usage of colloquialisms.
Some punctuation should be altered to remove full-stops, however. For example:
"Remember, this is very important, as it'll make or break a story. Without grammar, your story would essentially fall apart under its own weight."
should be changed to read
"Remember this as very important, as it will either make or break a story: without grammar, everything in your story would essentially fall apart under its own weight.".
I have also altered a few of the words and the beginning of the first clause.

18-Apr-2009 23:57:03 - Last edited on 19-Apr-2009 00:01:51 by Yrolg

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Hey Chekky. I'm back. Just thought I'd let you know I recently tried my hand at a non-script Noob Story, one with a plot in mind (but none-the-less no more sophisticated,) and it's been several days with no comments. I figure that this is down to the title, which I've put as "The Herblore Noob - Epic Story." Do you have any idea how I could improve it to attract more viewers, other than something like "Giving out free candy" or "If u read this u get fr33 st00f."
Thanks.
Epic fai- I mean Futile Crush.

19-Apr-2009 13:35:10

CaptChekaka

CaptChekaka

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Yeah, we'll definitely be needing a new grammar guide thing. I haven't seen Poller since he went on vacation, though, which is... eh. I'll have to find him somehow.
Anyway, Futile, normally it's just if they want to click on your title or not. Sometimes it's the author or the subject, so just try to make your title as interesting as possible. If it's something people think they'll want to read, they'll click on it. Aside from that, advertise on the SD, maybe? Not sure.
How about, "The Story of a Herb," which is probably a bad suggestion, but try that route, perhaps?
-- Chek

19-Apr-2009 17:28:53 - Last edited on 19-Apr-2009 17:29:48 by CaptChekaka

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You know, it may just be me (which it normally is, due to my eccentricity and little scientific or philosophical knowledge to support said attribute,) but stories that are obviously noob stories and don't require alot of effort to read seem to get more hits.
Such as between a title that says "Smite of the White Knights" and "Nooby the knight", I'd probably pick the second.
You know, I *id*'t need to ask, did I ... I pop the question and the answer comes to my head anyway, even if it's different from what someone else says.
Again with the unsupported eccentricity.
Uh ... I'll *how myself out, shall I? :P .

19-Apr-2009 19:28:32

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Infact, forget the previous post (bloody eccentricity,) I will try your suggestion of "The Story of a Herb", as I'm sure people would be wondering how something so small and insignificant could be made into a story, so they're likely to click on it :) .
Thanks.

19-Apr-2009 19:31:43

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