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Thanks Poller, I appreciate it
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Added some new stuff which has been added to the first page and the first post on page 2. I've now run out of reserves, so after I fill the top post on page 2 I will start using live posts for the story.
Fair warning for this new stuff. I added way more description to this section than I did in my notebook so right now I am just trying to get the information down and then I will proof it and, hopefully, polish it up over time. Unfortunately, right now I only had the time to write it so it may seem a bit rough until I can look over it again.
Also sorry for the meager, one post portions I've been doing lately lol. School is killing me right now, and I barely have any free time. Once school ends next Wednesday (for me at least) I will be free to devote more time and energy to this.
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Added some new stuff which has been added to the first page and the first post on page 2. I've now run out of reserves, so after I fill the top post on page 2 I will start using live posts for the story.
Fair warning for this new stuff. I added way more description to this section than I did in my notebook so right now I am just trying to get the information down and then I will proof it and, hopefully, polish it up over time. Unfortunately, right now I only had the time to write it so it may seem a bit rough until I can look over it again.
Also sorry for the meager, one post portions I've been doing lately lol. School is killing me right now, and I barely have any free time. Once school ends next Wednesday (for me at least) I will be free to devote more time and energy to this.
25-Apr-2013 14:59:35
Azigarath
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Nice monsters, but I don't find them terrifying. But then again if I saw such creatures in real-life, I'd probably have a heart attack. Not sure why'd they be hungry if they're so buff, unless their food ran out suddenly and they were unused to that. I feel that wailing does not fit, seeing as they seem to be large. You know, like, large creatures have deeper vocalisation.
Another thing, if these monsters are blind, how do they know where to find food or wander around at night?
''I knew that I was sixteen''
Why is it that almost every story I read is about teens and young adults being the protagonist? Well, guess I shouldn't complain, seeing as half my stories start with children growing up, but I did notice that young adults seem to be a common sight in fiction. Or maybe it's just me.
Heh thanks for the detailed reply. In regards to the monsters, I feel that a wail or scream makes them a bit eerie. You would expect this giant creature to have a deep roar, but when it has a high-pitched shriek instead, it's going to throw you off and adds to the creepiness of them (though this doesn't seem to work on you lol).
I'm gonna explain the creatures in more detail later on. Right now they were just a minor add to give a first glimpse and add tension while the two characters escaped.
As for the teenage main character I don't really have much of a reason. I guess it's cause my real age is closer to a teen than an adult maybe? I dunno lol. I just decided to go with sixteen.
thanks for reading, hopefully I'll have a lot more up when you return
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Nice monsters, but I don't find them terrifying. But then again if I saw such creatures in real-life, I'd probably have a heart attack. Not sure why'd they be hungry if they're so buff, unless their food ran out suddenly and they were unused to that. I feel that wailing does not fit, seeing as they seem to be large. You know, like, large creatures have deeper vocalisation.
Another thing, if these monsters are blind, how do they know where to find food or wander around at night?
''I knew that I was sixteen''
Why is it that almost every story I read is about teens and young adults being the protagonist? Well, guess I shouldn't complain, seeing as half my stories start with children growing up, but I did notice that young adults seem to be a common sight in fiction. Or maybe it's just me.
Heh thanks for the detailed reply. In regards to the monsters, I feel that a wail or scream makes them a bit eerie. You would expect this giant creature to have a deep roar, but when it has a high-pitched shriek instead, it's going to throw you off and adds to the creepiness of them (though this doesn't seem to work on you lol).
I'm gonna explain the creatures in more detail later on. Right now they were just a minor add to give a first glimpse and add tension while the two characters escaped.
As for the teenage main character I don't really have much of a reason. I guess it's cause my real age is closer to a teen than an adult maybe? I dunno lol. I just decided to go with sixteen.
thanks for reading, hopefully I'll have a lot more up when you return
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30-Apr-2013 01:58:36
Not sure when I'll get to write (though hopefully soon). A buddy of mine got some leave for a bit from the marines and didn't tell my friends and me until last night lol so we've been trying to spend time with him.
Not much else to say, just giving an update as to why I'm a dirty liar and didn't add anything yesterday or today
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Not much else to say, just giving an update as to why I'm a dirty liar and didn't add anything yesterday or today
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03-May-2013 00:38:03
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