If this is your first story on the forums, then it's too much.
Amazing, few flaws, and a plot never to be reckoned with. If I may, I wish to make a bio for you. It is not much, but you could use it within your chapters.
~BIO~
Name: Kinsing Spyder
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Weapon: An enchanted dagger which knocks the opponent out.
Clothing: A black normal outfit, and a small metal heart locket given to him by his former wife
"Powers": Has enhanced eyesight
Appearance: White hair, young, bright blue eyes, light skin and complexion.
Optional* History: His marriage of three years was cursed from the beginning. His wife, Jensine, asked him to kill her with a wine poison. His strung heart necklace is meaningful, no one touching it other than himself. Had grown fond of Teegan and watched her every move. Kinsing is of friends and close relations to Kerr. Kinsing finds Taena offensive, so he wishes to stay in secret of her and Teegan, just to find the right moment to be with her.
Hope that helps you with your story, if so it should go on.
02-Jan-2007 01:09:47
- Last edited on
02-Jan-2007 01:51:43
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IllidanRaive