Forums

Sisters

Quick find code: 49-50-953-25165024

Anne Lauten

Anne Lauten

Posts: 3,830 Adamant Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
Taena was getting tired.

They had been walking down the tunnel for what seemed like an eternity, and her strength was slowly giving out,

"Are you alright?" asked Sukrae, seeming to know exactly what she was feeling.

"I'm fine," she told him, "I think Teegan's passed out again though." And as she expected; his attention abruptly swiched from her, to her sister.

She rolled her eyes, even though he couldn't see her in the dark,

"Let's rest now," he said.

"Alright," she agreed, setting her twin down on the dusty floor, and sitting down herself.

"Teegan," she called, "we're stopping."

Teegan just groaned.

'Oh yay' Taena thought to herself, 'I'm stuck out here with two seriously hurt people'

"Lets get going," she said out loud, "I've been down here before, when I was looking for the way out, and there should be, maybe twenty more feet of this, and then a door."

"Alright," said Sukrae agreebly, "want me to help with Teegan?"

"No, I'm fine," she lied, "lets just go." And picking up Teegan, she continuted down the dry corridor.

At last they reached the door,

"You open it ok?" Taena asked Sukrae, "I've got my hands full."

"Sure," he said, pulling at the door's handle; at last it ground slowly open, and he stepped through.

10-Jul-2006 13:10:15 - Last edited on 28-Oct-2006 00:03:15 by Anne Lauten

A White Wolf

A White Wolf

Posts: 8,377 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
~Honorary Warlord of the Former Writer's Elite~

I saw this story as the favorite of someone applying to some story guild and decided to take a look.

I must say it's refreshing, to say the least, to see an author with considerable talent in this forum. So many of the talented left, and it's wonderful to see new, creative, talented writers.

Bravo. A few minor errors but by far and away it's a good story.

Keep it up.

~Leader of the Former TIGA and the Academy of Literature

12-Jul-2006 00:58:07

Anne Lauten

Anne Lauten

Posts: 3,830 Adamant Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile
I am going to leave tomorrow for Vermont, and I am asking anybody who likes this story to bump it while I'm gone, I will be gone for about a week. I will try to post a lot more of this story before I go (Tries a summon up creative writing mood) but it's my birthday tomorrow and I may not have much time. :|

12-Jul-2006 16:15:01 - Last edited on 12-Jul-2006 16:15:44 by Anne Lauten

Quick find code: 49-50-953-25165024 Back to Top