The drama is intense (Even if Mercutio/Void, Ravinius, and Arad seem to have fallen through cracks in the floor and dissapeared :p)
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"Is that why you aren't so sad at her funeral?" aren't should be weren't
"She lets out a sigh as she strapped her quiver onto her back." either say let out a sigh, or straps her quiver.
"I'll never forgive for this!" needs a you between forgive and for.
Raphael Quotes:
In the city of Feirro:
Faust: AHA! I knew it! The World in Flames was in my basement all along!
Meph: This doesn't seem physically possible.
Faust: Anything's possible with two scoops of raisins! Now onward, to our destiny!
Meph: Technically this is Dante's destiny. It is his story after all.
Faust: Well, LET'S GO ANYWAY!
In The World in Flames:
The soldiers saw a terrible sight. A monster was cutting them down like leaves in the wind.
Void: Your lives are forfeit. Your souls are mine.
Soldier: Argh! (The soldier is consumed by Void)
Soldier 2: Retreat!
Void: There is no escape. (rubble slides out and seals the doors and windows)
Commander: Mercutio. I know that's you in there. How could you betray your comrades like this? Think of all the battles we've fought in together!
Void: FOUGHT FOR WHAT!
Commander: Huh?
Void: Saradomin is no less scum then the monsters we have slain. Did you know he and Armadyll were going to pardon the zamorakians? Even after everything they've done they were going to be let loose!
Commander: That's... that's a lie.
Void: No. I have seen the future and it is a grim one. My only choice is to take matters into my own hands and end this. All of this. No more soldiers, no more wars, no more gods. Peace. A final, eternal peace.
Soldier 2: Your insane.
Commander: No, he's just the only one of us who is sane.
Soldier 2: Sir!?
Void: I am glad you understand. Now I grant you mercy commander, I grant you peace.
And then the soldiers saw nothing, nothing at all.
11-Feb-2009 02:57:11