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Sees is a word and if the sentence was "Zamorak sees the castle" or "the rest of the army sees the castle" that would be fine. But when there are multiple objects it should be "Zamorak and the rest of the army see the castle". Grammar... Can't live with it, can't live without it.
Raphael Quotes:
Faust: Doom doom doom doom, doom dee doom doom. That is all.
P.S: Chuck Norris can catch arrows in midair. He can also catch waterbuffalo in midair but that's another story.

21-Jan-2009 23:01:34 - Last edited on 21-Jan-2009 23:03:18 by Ark Von Doom

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Oooo, I see, my mistake. Buuuut...Grammar? What IS Grammar? I think I'm just being an idiot again >_>

I guess if Grammar didn't exist, the world would be filled with 1337.

Random Person: \/\/|-|0 4|P3 (_)?

Oh noes, It's happening! Ahhh! *runs*

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Anyways, thanks everyone. I appreciate it :D
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21-Jan-2009 23:57:09 - Last edited on 07-Jun-2016 23:42:47 by Serene End

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No cabbages for you -.-
Chapter 17: Doubtful
Eleven days passed in the desert, it was December 19th. The desert was bitterly cold on this day with the temperature being 15 degrees. It began to snow. Spero and Zenovia raced outside to see the snow, they both had a smile on their face. In the castle, Solomon walks to his study room's window and lets out a sigh."This is Alrous playing one of his little tricks." Solomon said. Back outside, Spero looks over at Zenovia with a depressed look on his face. Zenovia looks over at Spero, her smile goes down to a look of concern.
"What's the matter?" Zenovia asked.
Spero clenches his hands. "The Divine Dusk is only a week and three days away. I haven't learned a new power yet since I attempted Avner's Gomphos. How am I suppose to defeat him?" Spero replied.
"You shouldn't doubt yourself. I know you can defeat him."
"A mind troubled by doubt cannot focus on the course to victory." Solomon replied as he walked outside. Spero and Zenovia look over at Solomon. He looks at the two with a smirk on his face. "Would you like me to throw out another quote that my father taught me?"
"I don't know what I'm going to do."
"You must learn something Spero. Doubt will always come but you mustn't doubt yourself; this is what Alrous wants you to feel." Solomon looks up at the sky. "Just think, this snow is a way of Alrous taunting us."
"Solomon. What am I going to do?"
"Do something that will get your confidence up."
Spero sighs. "I'm going to try Avner's Gomphos again." Zenovia looks at Spero with her eyes widened. "Avner's Gomphos?! Don't you remember what happened last time!?" Spero shakes his head up and down. "Get back." Spero walked forward. Solomon crosses his arms with his eyes focused on Spero's actions. "If he gets the stance correct, he'll master this technique. However, if he doesn't; it'll lead to his death." Solomon said to himself.
The end
is only
the beginning...

26-Jan-2009 15:13:42 - Last edited on 27-Jan-2009 13:30:25 by Serene End

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Spero stands in the middle of the snow covered ground with his fists and eyes closed. Spero charges his right hand with all his energy as he plants it on the snow white ground. The clouds above began to swirl.
The people of Al Kharid looked up at the sky as the heat of the desert returned. The snow around quickly began to melt. Roars of thunder crashed around the area. The wind howled at speeds of 70 mph. Spero's whole body began glowing sky blue as a huge bolt of lighting was shot from the sky to the ground in-front of Spero. The ground shook after the impact of the bolt.
Zenovia smiled with much excitement. Solomon smirked as he felt very impressed. Spero stood up on his feet still glowing sky blue. He looks back at the two with a serious look on his face. He looked away as he lunged his right hand out in-front of him. A funnel cloud suddenly appears spinning up a mile wide tornado that blew at wind that exceeded the power of a F-4 tornado. The sand around was sucked into the spiraling vortex. Solomon and Zenovia's eyes were widened with an expression of shock. Spero clenched his right hand and the vortex disappeared. He again looks back at Solomon and Zenovia still bearing that very serious expression on his face.
"I'm very pleased that you awakened and truly mastered Avner's Gomphos." Solomon told Spero.
"It's not enough. I must awaken and master all of my powers." Spero replied. His voice sounded much rougher than it normally is.
"But you should be thrilled that you mastered that move." Zenovia said.
"I'm not happy with my progress. I need more power, more strength so that I may protect you Zenovia."
"I must report this to the Elder Druids." Solomon walks back into the castle. Spero stops glowing sky blue. He kneels on the ground as he panted heavily. He looks up at Zenovia. "What happened?" Spero asked. Meanwhile, Solomon walks into the Elder Druid's temple. Solomon bows.
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26-Jan-2009 15:24:02 - Last edited on 27-Jan-2009 13:31:41 by Serene End

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The eyes of the 8 Elder Druid statues lit up.
"Oh mighty 8 Elder Druids. Master Abd-Al-Rahman, Master Timothy, Master Vikrama, Mistress Caoi*he, Mistress Zohar, Master Wenceslas, Mistress Qamar, and Lord of the Elder Druids Sabas. I need your judgment." Solomon chanted. The torches lit around Solomon blasted into a color of green. The engraved Guthix emblem on the wall lights up into the color green. A blue like fog covers the temple. The statues of the Elder Druids begin to move on their own.
"He who has summoned us, speak now." Abd-Al-Rahman commanded. Solomon stands up.
"Yes, my lord." Solomon steps forward and moves his eyes to the left then to the right. "Spero Forseti has awakened his strongest power, Avner's Gomphos." Solomon replied.
"Hmm..I see. Has he learned anything else?" Caoi*he asked.
"While using Avner's Gomphos, he began to glow sky blue."
All the Elder Druid's eyes widened. "He began to glow sky blue!?" Vikrama shouted. All the Elder Druids looked at each other and began whispering words.
"Is there a problem?"
"Does that mean he has unlocked his full potential?" All seven Elder Druids look at Sabas. Sabas had his eyes closed and his left hand rubbing his chin. "Master Sabas. What do you think?"
"He must be given the power of the Elder Gods in order to achieve full power." Sabas replied.
"In other words, you want him to become a Full-God!? Timothy shouted.
"Indeed. We need to carry out the ritual immediately."
"But Lord Sabas, Lord Guthix said it was forbidden to-"
"Elder Solomon, I need to get Spero."
Solomon sighs. "Lord Sabas. I don't approve of your actions but if it is for the balance of this world; I will not disobey."
"Thank you brother." Solomon walks out of the Elder Druid's temple.
The End of Chapter 17
Next Chapter,
Chapter 18: Blind Affection
Thank you again for reading, I appreciate it ^_^ .
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26-Jan-2009 15:34:04 - Last edited on 07-Jun-2016 23:43:17 by Serene End

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By the power invested in me by the State of Canada I now pronounce you this months edits:
"The desert was bitterly cold on this day with the temperature being 15 degrees, it began to snow." run on sentence that needs a comma after day and a period after degrees, starting a new sentence.
"Do something that will get your confidants up." Should be confidence.
"this is way Alrous wants you to feel." Should be what.
"Spero charges his right hand with all his energy as he planted it on the snow white ground." Either say charged or say plants.
"But Lord Sabas. Lord Guthix said it was forbidden to-" should be a comma not a period after Sabas.
Raphael Quotes:
Vexxazrin: Elder Gods! Faust, you didn't tell em there were other Elder Gods in this story!
Faust: It was just introduced this chapter; how was I supposed to know?
Vexxazrin: Well do something about it!
Faust: Fine.
This is definitely an official Ark Von Doom edit:
"He must be given the power of the Elder Gods in order to achieve full power." Elder Gods should be changed to Large Sheep.
Faust: Happy?
Vexxazrin: Not good enough!
Faust: Jeez; what do you want fom me? Wait... I have an idea! (pulls out chainsaw)
Vexxazrin: What are you doing!
Faust: I'm going to destroy the post entirely!
Meph: This is madness!
Faust: No THIS IS TEXAS!
Meph: When did Texas get involved?
Faust:...
Meph:...
Faust: Well then I'll just have to go there myself. Pack our bags Meph we're going to The World in Flames!
Meph: This can't end well...

26-Jan-2009 22:22:57

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