Yes. Wonferfully good
Ah well, as long as you read it sometime...
Ah well, as long as you read it sometime...
29-Feb-2008 07:11:58
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"The other gods of old were utterly forgotten, wiped from sentient memory. Zaros, Armadyl, and even Seren were lost from thought, erased from thought by the misguided teachings of Saradomin."
You use "thought" twice in four words. Too many! Perhaps replace the second with 'memory' or something else. But not thought.
K, done with the prologue.
Also, remember to leave comments on a story this week. You've gotta get some activity in for the Forge.
You use "thought" twice in four words. Too many! Perhaps replace the second with 'memory' or something else. But not thought.
K, done with the prologue.
Also, remember to leave comments on a story this week. You've gotta get some activity in for the Forge.
29-Feb-2008 19:55:30 - Last edited on 29-Feb-2008 20:21:51 by Chuk
Good as usual Poller. You get 10/10
29-Feb-2008 21:16:37
Thankee, Pork
01-Mar-2008 11:29:59
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