Excellent story, English. I love how you answered one of the most difficult questions through Kiplin's devotion to an internet browser game inorder to gain the affection and attention of someone. It's very easy to think of your characters as real, breathing people and I enjoy how you tied the begening in with the end.
The quotes ‘Love is one of those things that comes to you, finds you, when the time is right.’ ‘You don’t know this. You can't assume and take for granted that you will ever be loved.’ remind me of a poem I've read and am currently writing a short paper on called "Next, Please" by Philip Larkin.
Google it, if you have the time. You'll be amazed at how the meaning of it is similar with your story.
-Eraser
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"I never liked the idea of a hood. In a hood, I discovered, I could see nothing but what was in front of me, only. I could only stare ahead, in one direction, oblivious to my surrounding, ignoring them at all costs. Even I, who knew nothing about the ways of the world, knew that life, when living in a hood, was boring."
Oh the hypocrisy!
12-Feb-2011 19:50:24
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