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~~The Priceless~~
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Yes, your crime will be up there for others to see
Edit: Forever.
Edit: Forever.
06-Apr-2010 03:22:32 - Last edited on 06-Apr-2010 03:30:44 by Englishkid62
The story is amazing. Every sentence is almost a masterpiece in it's own right. This story could be compared even to professional authors.
Almost cried at the end!
Almost cried at the end!
08-Apr-2010 11:59:39
Aww.
Thanks for your kind and generous words!
Thank you for reading, and letting me know. Not many people do
Thanks for your kind and generous words!
Thank you for reading, and letting me know. Not many people do
08-Apr-2010 14:53:19 - Last edited on 08-Apr-2010 14:56:58 by Englishkid62
Correction, they don't exist on this forum anymore. And why not, I only ever got a chance to read this one.
10-Apr-2010 06:11:24
You never read the other two?
10-Apr-2010 11:17:58
Review Time!
Review of ‘The Priceless’ by Englishkid62. Reviewed by Caydock
General Comments: To start, I have to wonder why you chose to put all the dialogue into apostrophes rather than quotations. I know Tolkien chose to do this (so it’s not really an error.
) but I am curious…is it a British thing? Also, I’ll point out that I will NOT be removing points for British spelled words, as I know that that’s where you currently reside. That said, here’s the review:
Error Corrections:
‘My GOD, will he still play when the rest of us are dead?’
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I remember when I was just starting to write my first story on the forums when a certain Englishkid62 paid a visit to the humble thread. One of the first things he said was, *Capitalizing all the letters of one word removes from the impact.” Now it has come in a full circle.
Technically this isn’t really an error, but I thought I’d mark it anyway. (I wonder how many “technicality” errors there will be in this review…)
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I remembered turning, and scowling at him, unable to believe my association with such person.
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Such person? Maybe such a person.
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Unlike the dry, A-Level coursework now plagued my timetable, RuneScape provided an ethereal, fantasy world in which no one would ever tell me what to do.
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Did you mean ‘which’ now plagued my timetable?
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His eyes widened and as if the devil were eating him alive.
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The ‘and’ makes it seem like the sentence is meant to continue, yet it comes to a full stop. Removing the ‘and’ would remedy this issue.
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No one has ever had a proper conversation with Alex until now.
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Had, not has, I believe.
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He remembered everything David has ever said to him, every word, and no else’s, clinging onto them because they had a certain magical ring, therefore originated, he believed, from a sacred text.
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Review of ‘The Priceless’ by Englishkid62. Reviewed by Caydock
General Comments: To start, I have to wonder why you chose to put all the dialogue into apostrophes rather than quotations. I know Tolkien chose to do this (so it’s not really an error.
) but I am curious…is it a British thing? Also, I’ll point out that I will NOT be removing points for British spelled words, as I know that that’s where you currently reside. That said, here’s the review:
Error Corrections:
‘My GOD, will he still play when the rest of us are dead?’
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I remember when I was just starting to write my first story on the forums when a certain Englishkid62 paid a visit to the humble thread. One of the first things he said was, *Capitalizing all the letters of one word removes from the impact.” Now it has come in a full circle.
Technically this isn’t really an error, but I thought I’d mark it anyway. (I wonder how many “technicality” errors there will be in this review…)
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I remembered turning, and scowling at him, unable to believe my association with such person.
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Such person? Maybe such a person.
-~-
Unlike the dry, A-Level coursework now plagued my timetable, RuneScape provided an ethereal, fantasy world in which no one would ever tell me what to do.
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Did you mean ‘which’ now plagued my timetable?
-~-
His eyes widened and as if the devil were eating him alive.
-
The ‘and’ makes it seem like the sentence is meant to continue, yet it comes to a full stop. Removing the ‘and’ would remedy this issue.
-~-
No one has ever had a proper conversation with Alex until now.
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Had, not has, I believe.
-~-
He remembered everything David has ever said to him, every word, and no else’s, clinging onto them because they had a certain magical ring, therefore originated, he believed, from a sacred text.
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10-Apr-2010 18:23:21
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