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Chuk

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Hey thanks, Azigarath!
Notice that it's 20 posts in HALF a year, not a whole year. XP
I didn't actually start the rewrite 'til last spring. Just had to remake the thread because the old one maxed. Which is still worse than a snail's pace, I admit, but I'm looking to have some adds tomorrow or Thursday, so that'll make things look a tad better.
Anyway, I do hope you enjoyed reading enough to come back for more.

21-Sep-2011 03:57:48

Azigarath

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oh, that was a fast reply.
So, it really was half a year and not a full one. Yes, I am a top math student. *hides*
Yeah, you're welcome, I have no problem reading something new, gives me a break from my usual things.
So now I'll wait until later, because that's when more of the story will come.

oh, and on page 2, post 9, the first paragraph uses 'is' instead of his, just thought I'd point that out.
I just read the 4 new posts. Words like shall and heed annoy me though, but oh well.

21-Sep-2011 04:04:30 - Last edited on 24-Sep-2011 00:40:01 by Azigarath

Chuk

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Four new posts on page 4! Not quite the end of chapter One, though.

23-Sep-2011 07:34:17

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Oggieyiey3

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What! Xaran dead, I kind of saw it, but I felt a drop as it did, the headmaster does deserve to die.
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08-Oct-2011 20:42:24 - Last edited on 08-Oct-2011 20:43:08 by Oggieyiey3

Chuk

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He most certainly does! But I'm afraid he's a bit too tough for that for the time being.
In other news, I'm struggling with the final scene of Chapter One. I'm terrible with the emotional ones.

11-Oct-2011 12:18:03

Chuk

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Doing a bit of writing now (or trying to), since the two contests I'm involved in are all wrapped up for the time being. With a little luck, I might add this week, so keep your fingers crossed.

If anyone still cares, that is.

01-Nov-2011 12:45:57

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Hey, Chuk!
Do you mind, when and if you have some free time, to review what little I have written on my? I glimpse at your work and I'm just in awe at how you can conjure lengthy paragraphs filled with description, emotion, plot and dislogue.
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Thanks, man. However, don't feel that you have too.

24-Nov-2011 11:40:32

Chuk

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Welp, finally managed to wrap up Chapter One. Any and all comments on that last scene between Ahriele and Aletayr would be most appreciated.

17-Dec-2011 11:56:46

Azigarath

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Well, I did finish that last post last night before going to bed. Personally I was never a fan of emotion, and in my own stories emotion is secondary.
In my latest story, I depicted a bunch of Varulvs (Werewolves equipped like Vikings who have lost the ability to morph back into human form) having entered Draynor, which is ruled by Vampires in the story, and basically the Varulvs go on a killing spree, with the adult Varulvs killing adult Vampires, and the Varulv cubs killing Vampires kids.
They round up the survivors and butcher them alive basically while tossing them over bonfires, and eat their body parts, also feeding the cute teddybear-like Varulv cubs. All of this is witnessed by a one Vampire girl, who hid in an attic and looks through a window. And after all that she only sheds, like, three tears. A bit later, she and the few other survivors are forced to co-operate with the werewolves that butchered and then ate their families, and instead of crying the Vampires are just looking for a chance of revenge.
Yeah, I think I make my characters too unrealistically stoic.
But, more importantly, your scene shows me that the characters are very human, and I almost felt an arm over my shoulders; it was just an automatic feeling I got from the way you pictured it for me. I think it was done very well.
...and I keep picturing the room blue for some reason, with a little bit of red here and there.

19-Dec-2011 00:23:44 - Last edited on 19-Dec-2011 00:25:49 by Azigarath

Chuk

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Awesome, a comment! You just made my day, Azigarath.

I'm glad the feeling of the scene came across. I must've started it over about a half dozen times at least, which is part of why I didn't get it done 'til now. It's good to know that my effort paid off. Thanks very much for commenting on it.

And blue's a good enough color for the room. It is in a Saradomin Academy, after all.

19-Dec-2011 01:01:22

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