You're only allowed in that corner if you come out of it to read as I post the rewrite. Otherwise, stay out! And...
It was Chapter Thirteen. Had to go look just to be sure. Here's the passage. Maybe it'll ring a bell:
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He paused, and weakly tried to raise his hand. It never left the floor, but the effort left him wheezing. Keryz gripped his comrade’s shoulder, opposite the wound, waiting. Finally, conquering his breath, Gertari managed to continue, his speech broken and barely audible.
“Relnor…your kid form Relnor…his father…he still lives…We pulled him out. Somewhere in the North, now*Erafae Chaelom.”
Again he coughed, this time stopping only for death. So he passed, shrouded in fitful orange light in the depths of a stronghold of both enemy and lord. Keryz pulled Gertari’s cloak over his cold features and left him on the floor. Then he turned and strode away, never looking back.
28-Mar-2011 09:14:14
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