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Yrolg

Yrolg

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Pronunciation Guide:
Note: if there is a term missing, please simply post asking its pronunciation. I will then add it to this guide.
Le Havre de Grâce - City in Northern France bordering the English Isle.
Lay Hahv Day Grahs
Louis-Pierre Champeaux - Business mogul, great politician, and integral figure of Southeastern France.
Loo-ee Pee-air Sham-POE
L'Morfique - The Champeaux Estate, it is in Cannes and is the largest estate in southern France. It was built in the mid 1600s in the french baroque style (similar to Versailles).
Luh-More-FEEK
Cannes - City encompassing L'Morfique; annexed by France in 1860 from Italy; famous vacation town.
CANS
Nice - County near L'Morfique.
NEESE
Doctor Gillemand - Doctor called for by Mdm Gusteau.
Jhee-MAHN
Madame Marie Ariel Gusteau - Presumed heiress to the Champeaux fortune, she is exaggerative and insane.
Muh-REE Air-ee-el Goos-TOE
Madame Le Kinffe - Person described by Mdm Gusteau to be the first afflicted by the mysterious disease.
Lay KIHNF
Les Faits - The newspaper secretly printed and published by Msr Champeaux, it was written by Lord Callobridge.
Lay Fah-EE
Marseilles - City where Msrs Champeaux and Callobridge first met; it is a large port on the Mediterranean coastline of France.
Mahr-SIE
Jean Marlante - Mysterious man with whom Msr Champeaux was able to protect Les Faits .
Jhohn Mahr-lahnt

22-Aug-2010 22:33:50 - Last edited on 24-May-2011 21:05:04 by Yrolg

LovelyMelons

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Mmm...okay, where to start? Yrolg, you are a marvelous poet. You works always dazzle me, and I literally adore them. Your intricate syllables, how you shape things together; impeccable! But your writing...well...I say you must stick to poetry.
Poetry and Stories are two different things. There is the occasional bridge between the two, in which a person can master both. I do not think you have built that bridge, as you are significantly better at poetry.
I don't think anyone has really dared to tell you this as they are afraid you'll ruin them, as you are the 'unmovable brick wall'. (Or so says Crocefisso... O_o ) Anyways, you use outstanding vocabulary in your stories, however, to be bluntly honest, make it less interesting.
I don't believe I'm alone when I say this: Stick to poetry.

15-Sep-2010 19:41:42 - Last edited on 15-Sep-2010 19:42:24 by LovelyMelons

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Labryinths,
Hello. It's great to see you posting again after your short hiatus. Thank you for posting: I appreciate all comments.
If you wouldn't mind, could you please identify some aspects in which my prose could improve? You have so far said that it is worse than my poetry (a statement that I do disagree with, reciprocating its opposite instead), but you haven't really mentioned anything other than my vocabulary.
On the topic of my vocabulary, I must disagree. I think that there is a very discernible difference between the vernacular choices and the prolixious tendencies. I have no trouble at all saying that my prose is verbose: it is something that I have no real intent to fix for general purposes. Something to be considered, and which I would not have expected you to realize, this thread having no introduction and all, is that this piece is written in the Victorian Franco-English style and is more a rough draft than anything. To give background information, this era was one in which books were read as sheer entertainment, but they were expensive. If, then, one could find a book that was so convoluted and dense that it would take more than a simple passing glance or skim to analyse its contents, it was desirable.
I do not know if you have read my other pieces, but this one, I can actively assure you, does not represent the status quo. If you would like a greater judgment on my ability to write extended prose, I suggest reading "Lunar Eclipse", "A Christmas Tale", "A Children's Tale", "Darker Times", and "A Message in a Barrel". Some of these are no longer on these forums, most of them are unfinished. I plan to repost a few of them (with limited variance from the original) in the near future, so, if you can, please keep an eye out.
I would really love to hear more comments stating not merely that there is a difference in quality but what it is and how to begin its remediation. Thank you again, though, for taking the time to read this tale.

23-Sep-2010 14:57:50

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Crocefisso,
I know that you agree with Labyrinths on the matter of vocabulary (and you two are far from alone in this respect), but have you also pointed out the differences between my poetry and prose? If so, I'm terribly sorry, but I can't seem to find them. Would you mind either directing me to existing posts or, if they don't exist, posting it again?

23-Sep-2010 14:59:16

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09-Nov-2010 03:38:21

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Hey Im Dark,
ASCII art is not appropriate outside the Forum Games's "Bored? Draw #ere" sticky. If you have any comments of literary merit or some statement which may be interpreted to relate to this story in any way, please share those instead. I would love to know of the parts you did and did not like and what you would have me do to improve it.

09-Nov-2010 03:41:19 - Last edited on 09-Nov-2010 03:41:55 by Yrolg

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Yrolg i have never read any of your poetry but after reading this i believe im going to. i usually do not comment of the runescape forums but i felt a definete need to. Your story is awsome i felt as if i was reading a profesinal quality story. too many times while browsing the forum do i find stories not well thought out but this one was exeptinal. thank you for writing this and please continue writting stories.
ps. plz excuase my writing mistakes

09-Nov-2010 04:08:02

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Rumi555,
Thanks for your wonderful comments! I really do appreciate the fact that you took the time to log in and post such flattering things. I hope you find my poetry as enjoyable as my prose. (For ease of searching, my two poetry compilations are: "Poetry: A Compilation" and "Yrolg's Omnibus"; the latter has short prose in it as well.)
If you find that you think of things I can improve upon in the future, please don't hesitate to post them! I'm never offended when a user posts something he or she thinks needs attention. As a reader, you are not capable of having a wrong opinion. :)

09-Nov-2010 04:11:10

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