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NotFishing

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Azigarath said :
Why, hello Annie.

I usually summarize or reference other users' posts because it helps me memorize what's going on, character names, setting, and the situation. It's also proof that I am actively reading other peoples' posts, however, I've been intentionally skipping the goblin subplot, so that when Adeline gets in contact, I won't be able to expect what's going on. Then, I'll read through those posts.

Of course, if there's an issue of me referencing other posts too often, I'll stop if necessary.

My main issue is that you often say things aren't true, or that your character shouldn't have known.

For example, you made mention of "some little guy scurrying around", and although you said your character didn't know that, something like that seemed out of place in a post when you just could have said there were some strange happenings.

And in your most recent post you said that Joric had almost hit a friendly, which isn't true - he had almost hit an enemy. You also made mention of Lord Byman being swarmed, although Joric was the one who had been swarmed and Byman bailed him out. Byman himself was only attacked by like one guy afterwards, which was quickly dealt with.

It also makes your posts much longer than they need to be, and personally I find that overly-long posts with unnecessary detail are slightly frustrating to read. That knowledge can just as easily be gained from reading the original posts instead of a slightly inaccurate recap. Imagine if everybody summarized every little thing the other characters had done up to that point in their posts.

It also basically means your character is taking the time to observe and evaluate every single detail of every fighter, which would distract her from the actual combat. That seems unlikely, so it feels as though you're speaking more in terms of what you know than what your character knows. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

10-Nov-2015 13:19:29 - Last edited on 10-Nov-2015 21:47:56 by NotFishing

NotFishing

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And personally, I find it better to make posts as much in the character's point of view as possible.

That said, I don't think there are any official or unofficial rules against what you're doing. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

10-Nov-2015 13:19:55 - Last edited on 10-Nov-2015 13:21:30 by NotFishing

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I hate that my headphones broke last week. It's difficult to write anything without mood music. D:

I'll try to post sometime today; currently in the library working on a schedule for next semester and that's slightly more important than posting right away. And by slightly, I mean by like 0.00000001%.
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10-Nov-2015 16:11:28

Azigarath

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Oops, I'll fix those mistakes very soon. Perhaps I'm reading too much in too short an amount of time. I tend to have a third-person narration in my RPing; my RPing isn't in the viewpoint of my characters, it's in the viewpoint of myself. But I'll try to narrow it to a first-person limitation. I tend to have lots of detailed description because of my story-making past, and then I feel the need to prove I am reading posts.

I'm also actively reading multiple stories in Wattpad, so going through so many different stories by different people, I might get mixed-up every now and then.

11-Nov-2015 00:11:32

NotFishing

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Azigarath said :
Oops, I'll fix those mistakes very soon. Perhaps I'm reading too much in too short an amount of time. I tend to have a third-person narration in my RPing; my RPing isn't in the viewpoint of my characters, it's in the viewpoint of myself. But I'll try to narrow it to a first-person limitation. I tend to have lots of detailed description because of my story-making past, and then I feel the need to prove I am reading posts.

I'm also actively reading multiple stories in Wattpad, so going through so many different stories by different people, I might get mixed-up every now and then.

I'm not saying you should go entirely first person, just make your posts based more around what your characters know than what you know. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

11-Nov-2015 01:15:14 - Last edited on 11-Nov-2015 01:15:44 by NotFishing

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